Creative artists and goverment restrictions

[jesus]

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas(in words,pictures,music or film) in
which way they wish. There should no government restrictions on what they wish. To what extent do you agree
or disagree with this opinion?


It is common today, many individuals are emerging their creativity via media or awareness programs.
Although, they are obliged to follow certain inaccessibility to encounter their exemption through governments policy. It is
argued that creative individuals should be allowed the freedom to show their creativity in their own approach, without
any government restriction. This will be shown by analyzing how an personal concept can function beyond its limitation
and derive an unplatable notion in a society.

Looking first at the saying,"Human stupidity is infinite.", which means any intelligent person could
approach negative track. For instance, contrary to the satisfying entertainment, many male artist's had been punished
for their violent act in bollyhood. This makes it apparent that stupidity can acts as a precursor to a criminal activities.
Thus, there are obvious parallels between the freedom for creative individuals and government restriction.

In addition to this, affording complete exemption catalyzes negative impact in a community. To
examplify, despite its ability to educate, movies contain unplatable violent and sexual contents. This makes it clear
that misinterpretation on freedom can hinder a peaceful society. As a result, government plays an optimal role to
sustain positive environment.

After analyzing the areas of stupidity and unplatable impact, it has been proven that government
shouldn't provide complete freedom to creative individuals, and innovate some rules for them. It is expected that
equality in rights and obligation could hinder the misinterpretation among people, also constitute pleasant atmosphere
in the foreseeable future.

[jesus]

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[Flick]

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words,pictures,music or film) in
which way they wish. There should no government restrictions on what they wish. To what extent do you agree
or disagree with this opinion?


Nowadays many individuals are expressing their creativity via media or awareness programs.
However, they are obliged to follow certain inaccessibility to encounter their exemption through governments policy.(<--I don't understand this sentence.) It is
argued that creative individuals should be allowed the freedom to show their creativity in their own approach, without
any government restriction. This will be shown by analyzing how a personal concept can function beyond its limitation
and derive an unplatable notion in a society.(<--I don't understand your meaning. In the previous statement, you suggest there should be no restrictions. But in this sentence you say no restrictions leads to negative results.)

Consider the saying,"Human stupidity is infinite", which means any intelligent person could
approach negative track.(<--What is a negative track?) For instance, contrary to the satisfying entertainment, many male artist's had been punished
for their violent act in Bollywood.(<--Can you provide an example? What is satisfying entertainment?) This makes it apparent that stupidity can act as a precursor to a criminal activities.(<--How does stupidity lead to criminality? Can you give an example?)
Thus, there are obvious parallels between the freedom to create and government restriction.

In addition to this, affording complete exemption catalyzes negative impacts in a community. For example, despite its ability to educate, movies contain unpalatable violence and sexual content. This makes it clear
that misinterpretation of freedom can hinder a peaceful society. As a result, government plays an optimal role to
sustain a positive environment.(<--Can you provide an example of a violent movie or a movie that hinders peace?)

After analyzing the areas of stupidity and unpalatable impact, it has been proven that government
shouldn't provide complete freedom to creative individuals, and innovate some rules for them. It is expected that
equality in rights and obligation could hinder the misinterpretation among people, also constitute pleasant atmosphere
in the foreseeable future.(<--I don't understand how you reached this conclusion.)