Topic: Public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their limited resources on expensive high-tech media such as software, videos or DVDs. Do you agree or disagree?
Essay:
In this modern era, technology is playing a very vital role in every aspects of our life. This is quite apparent in public libraries, where book are day by day getting replaced by high-tech media. It is not agreed that the limited resources of the public libraries will be wasted if used for high-tech media and the same should be utilized for books. This very fact can be easily proved by analyzing how high-tech media can ease the access to the books and reduce the monotonous way of reading.
Firstly by changing the public library from traditional books-on-the-shelf style to modern high-tech one can actually open up avenues for on the run access. For instance even if a user wants to access a library material from outside library they can easily go to the online sites and get hold of the required material. Which in a way makes it easily accessible to the users and this service simply cannot be catered by a traditional library. Thus the costs involved in high-tech libraries are fruitful.
Moreover, the use of high-tech media like software, videos or DVDs are very important as they are helpful in negating the monotonous way of traditional reading. A world wide survey has proved the fact that a normal human being is 70% more attracted towards images/videos than a plain text. Thus after stating this we can very easily make a claim that the public libraries should promote for high-tech progression.
Following the analysis of the advantages of high-tech library over a tradition library we can safely conclude that the resource used by public library for high-tech media are not a waste and the same should be encouraged. It is expected that more public libraries around the world will follow the footsteps of high-tech advancement.
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Please evaluate my writing.
Please evaluate my writing.
Last edited by Prams on Sun Apr 12, 2015 6:55 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Re: Please evaluate my writing.
If possible also give the essay an approx band score. I am still a beginner for IELTS, I need at least band 7-7.5
Any suggestion to improve will be highly appreciated!
Any suggestion to improve will be highly appreciated!
Re: Please evaluate my writing.
As far as I'm concerned, this essay would score at least 7 possibly even 8. But I'm no Ielts marker, neither am I a guru by any stretch of imagination. Anyways I have noticed that you use Ryan's structure, am I right?Prams wrote:If possible also give the essay an approx band score. I am still beginner for IELTS, I need at least band 7-7.5
Any suggestion to improll be highly appreciated!
Re: Please evaluate my writing.
terry3218 wrote:As far as I'm concerned, this essay would score at least 7 possibly even 8. But I'm no Ielts marker, neither am I a guru by any stretch of imagination. Anyways I have noticed that you use Ryan's structure, am I right?Prams wrote:If possible also give the essay an approx band score. I am still beginner for IELTS, I need at least band 7-7.5
Any suggestion to improll be highly appreciated!
Hi Terry,
You are absolutely right, I have used Ryan's structure. Recently I started preparing for IELTS and in the process I saw some of the Ryan's videos. Instantly I become a huge fan of Ryan. It is his videos which taught me how to structure my writing, before watching them I had no clue how to write something!
Anyways, can I have any suggestion for improvement? Areas where I am lacking/Scope of improvement?
Anybody can comments. Any criticism will be accepted.
This is my first writing, I seriously need some motivation and guiding path.
Thanks!