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Most people are going to universities these days than in the past, they start to work later in life with higher qualifications. Do you see this a positive or a negative development?

In this new era, education has been playing important role. This can be seen evidently with the increasing demand for highly qualified workforce in the industries as well as government aided organizations. The trend for going to universities for graduation and post-graduation has been increased steadily over the years, I believe this is a positive development for the country as well as for individual. This will be proven by analyzing the benefits of higher education to nation as well to individual in this essay.

Firstly, students who are qualified from universities will become either doctors, engineers, scientist or lawyers, one or the other way they all contribute to the betterment of the society. For example, in Indian space research organization scientist develop the communication satellite for the home country as well as they develop for neighboring countries which brings huge sum of money to the Indian economy, same way our engineers known for software application development bring lot of jobs from other countries and create jobs for the graduated students in the country, this way they fill huge sum of tax to the government and thereby increasing the Gross domestic product of the country, so we can safely say that the graduation brings benefits to the country, however, we cannot omit the profit which brings to individual also.

Adding to the above point, higher qualification means better chance of getting a graded jobs in reputed companies or government aided organizations, which means better facilities such as big bungalow, car, health insurance and other allowances by company expenditure. For example, our scientist and Indian administrative officers enjoy the government provided bungalows and commute by government provided car, this was they lead luxurious life in the society when compared to undergraduate workers.

In my opinion, having graduation degree one can get a better job, which leads to living a quality of life at the same time they are the one who contribute major portion of the gross domestic product.
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