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[shruti_ielts]

Q1. You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to Mr. Moore describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job.
Waiter/waitress required for evening work. Some experience necessary.
Ans.
Dear Mr. Moore,

With reference to your advertisement regarding the vacancy of a waitress for evening work, here I am writing to apply for the same.
I am a 20 year old female studying hotel management .My classes finish in the afternoon,so I am free in the evening.Also I have worked previously with a renowned hotel as a front desk executive and also took part in occasional hotel events wherein I served as waitress cum host.
I have been appreciated for my punctuality and integrity by my last employers many a times.I have also received many accolades for my good behavior and excellent service orientations.
last but not the least ,I strongly believe that hard work and sincerity are the key to success in any profession.
If you think I fit your requirements,I am keen to join work as early as possible.

Looking forward to hear from you soon.

Thanking you
Your's Faithfully

[Flick]

Q1. You want to apply for the following job. Write a letter to Mr. Moore describing your previous experience and explaining why you would be suitable for the job.
Waiter/waitress required for evening work. Some experience necessary.
Ans.

Dear Mr. Moore,

With reference to your advertisement regarding the vacancy of a waitress for evening work, here I am writing to apply for the same.(<--Reword to: "I am writing to apply for the position of waitress for evening work you recently advertised.")
I am a 20 year old female studying hotel management. My classes finish in the afternoon, so I am free in the evening. Also, I have worked previously for a renowned hotel as a front desk executive and also took part in occasional hotel events wherein I served as waitress cum host.
I have been appreciated for my punctuality and integrity by my last employers many a times.(<--Reword to: "I am punctual and polite, as my previous employer can confirm.") I have also received many accolades for my good behavior and excellent custome service.
Last but not least, I strongly believe that hard work and sincerity are the key to success in any profession.
If you think I fit your requirements, I am keen to start as soon as possible.

Looking forward to hear from you soon.


Your's Faithfully