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Writing tast 2 academic

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Education plays a pivotal role in shaping the future generation. In relation to this, the mode of teaching in the recent past has dramatically evolved due to the introduction of technology. There are no contentions that technology will substitute the role of teachers in the academe. This argument will be discussed by pointing-out the importance of teachers in the field of personal knowledge and discipline.

For one, teachers role is to communicate and share information to their students in the most simplest way for better understanding. A student might get confused during classroom discussions and teachers can expound the information by imparting personal experiences to explain the topic. In this way students can relate to the situation thus it can facilitate learning. On the other hand, technology driven classroom cannot do this making it more complex for students to assimilate new ideas. It is evident that teachers personal touch to teaching can greatly influence students.

In addition, in a classroom setting, students manifest different attitudes towards learning. If a particular student is acting bizarre or odd. a human teacher can impose discipline as part of learning, and rules and regulations must be observed. If they adhere to this, rewards will be given and if not, certain penalty might be incurred. This reward and penalty system cannot be done by a machine instructor. Thus, the teachers position in shaping students can never be replaced by any machine or technology.

It is clearly shown that teachers role will never be supplemented by technology in two points, mainly, on personal touch to teaching and on the aspect of discipline. It is predicted that the future of education still needs human intervention rather than full reliance to technology.
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Education plays a pivotal role in shaping the future generation. In relation to this, the mode of teaching in the recent past has dramatically evolved due to the introduction of technology. There are no contentions that technology will substitute the role of teachers in the academe. This argument will be discussed by ("pointing out") pointing-out the importance of teachers in the field of personal knowledge and discipline.

For one, ("a teacher's") teachers role is to communicate and share information to their students in the most ("simple") simplest way for better understanding. A student might get confused during classroom discussions and teachers can expound the information by imparting personal experiences to explain the topic. In this way students can relate to the situation(",") thus it can facilitate learning. On the other hand, technology driven ("classrooms") classroom cannot do this making it more complex for students to assimilate new ideas. It is evident that ("a teacher's") teachers personal touch ("for") to teaching can greatly influence students.

In addition, in a classroom setting, students manifest different attitudes towards learning. If a particular student is acting bizarre or odd(","). a human teacher can impose discipline as part of learning, and rules and regulations must be observed. If they adhere to this, rewards will be given and if not, ("a") certain penalty might be incurred. This reward and penalty system cannot be done by a machine instructor. Thus, ("a teacher's") the teachers position in shaping students can never be replaced by any machine or technology.

It is clearly shown that ("a teacher's") teachers role will never be supplemented by technology ("for") in two points, mainly, ("the") on personal touch ("for") to teaching and ("for") on the aspect of discipline. It is predicted that the future of education still needs human intervention rather than full reliance ("on") to technology.
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Thank you for editing my essay. Now I know that i got problem with "prepositions".
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benjo_sabilala wrote:Thank you for editing my essay. Now I know that i got problem with "prepositions".
Try to also start sentences with complex words: "http://www.onlineenglishteacher.org/stu ... -sentences".
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Re: Writing tast 2 academic

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Again, Thank you. I wrote another essay based from your book.

Q: Smart devices have put all of the world's information at our fingertips. What are the drawbacks of this development?

The advancement of technology serves as a linchpin for a better life. In particular, the emergence of of smart devices like mobile phones, tablets etc. created an avenue for information technology. Despite this, there are contentions that this form of knowledge can minimize human interaction and create chaos to its users. The reliance for technology and absence of personal connections are the main points to this argument.

In a technology driven society, people's reliance to machine will gradually increase through time and will lead to total dependency. Moreover, the use of these machinery has an impact on how humans gather information. The value of internet is one main reason to this phenomenon. In the past, if students want to do research, they avail the service of the library and painstakingly search for books, magazines or references that can contribute to their project. Nowadays, the importance of this gesture is gradually devalued. High dependency on internet-capable devices is rampant and younger generations will never learn the value of hard work if this continues in the near future.

In addition, according to statistics, human interaction is significantly reduced due to unending use of this devices. Take mobile phones as a perfect example. This particular piece of device can multi-task giving more access to information technology. Students can now have an interaction with their professors without physically present in a classroom setting. Though it has a number of advantages but the essence of learning in a real classroom is greatly compromised and part of learning is to have live interaction with teachers. Thus, technology can hinder the strong bond between students and mentors.

In a nutshell, gathering or receiving information has been upgraded with the advent of technology but certain setbacks like dependency and loss of personal connection outweighs its advantages. It can be predicted that if this persists the value of human will be superseded by machines.
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