Dear Flick, Hi, may I ask your opinion about this writing, do you think it can get 7 ?

[Omid_fr@yahoo.com]

More and more prisons are being built to house the world's criminals, and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In any country, the world over, a rigorous set of rules and regulations are needed to be vigorously imposed and followed by governments to secure the society against crimes and criminals. For those who disobey the law, there should be strict punishments like incarceration in prison to both punish criminals and inform, maybe threaten, people about the consequences of criminal activities. It is argued without a shadow of a doubt that long term punishment plays a central role in declining the crime problem. This will be analyzed by looking at the outcomes of hefty punishments and benefits of long term isolation of criminals. (103)

At the outset, it is important to iterate the importance of self-control on what people do. Take a period of twenty years of imprisonment for reselling twenty grams of any kind of drug as an example. As a consequence of this policy, the number of those who take such a risk declines considerably, the point that positively correlates with the results of a recently conducted research in the department of sociology of the University of Tehran by Doctor Alireza Moghaddam. Thus, it can be seen that increasing the negative consequences of criminal activities yields in a mentionable decrease in the number of recorded crimes meaning a help to solving crime problem. (111)

The last but not the least, it should be mentioned that long term imprisonment, inevitably means long term isolation of criminals from the society. Back to the previous example of reselling drugs, that twenty years of incarceration immunes the society against that person for a plausible period of time. In the light of this point of view, the idea of profitability (beneficiality?) of long lasting penalties is difficult to debunk. (70)

Although the above discussion demonstrates that there are merits to the idea of long term-term imprisonment, to face new crime types, it is felt that new prisons need to be built to serve the society.(35)

[Flick]

More and more prisons are being built to house the world's criminals, and many people believe long-term imprisonment is the answer to solving the crime problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

In any country, the world over, a rigorous set of rules and regulations are needed to be vigorously imposed and followed by governments to secure society against crimes and criminals. For those who disobey the law, there should be strict punishments, such as incarceration, to both punish criminals and inform, maybe threaten, people of the consequences of criminal activities. It is argued without a shadow of a doubt that long term punishment plays a central role in reducing the crime problem. This will be analyzed by looking at the outcomes of hefty punishments and the benefits of long term isolation of criminals.

At the outset, it is important to iterate the importance of self-control in what people do. Take a period of twenty years of imprisonment for reselling twenty grams of any kind of drug as an example. As a consequence of this policy, the number of those who take such a risk declines considerably. This point that positively correlates with the results of recently conducted research in the Department of Sociology at the University of Tehran by Doctor Alireza Moghaddam. Thus, it can be seen that increasing the negative consequences of criminal activities yields a significant decrease in the number of recorded crimes meaning an improvement in solving the crime problem.

Last but not least, it should be mentioned that long term imprisonment inevitably means long term isolation of criminals from society. Back to the previous example of reselling drugs, that twenty years of incarceration protects society against that person for a long period of time. In the light of this point of view, the idea of the benefits of long lasting penalties is difficult to debunk.

Although the above discussion demonstrates that there are merits to the idea of long term-term imprisonment, to face new crime types, it is felt that new prisons need to be built to serve society.

[Omid_fr@yahoo.com]

Hi Flick
thank you for reading the text...
in your opinion , what will be the score that an examiner will give to this essay ?
6
7
8
8.5
thank you