please review essay

[reidun]

task:
1.Recent advancements in technology have led to many changes in our daily lives, but some people would argue that we are becoming too dependent on technology and that not all these changes are beneficial. Give your opinion and support your argument.

Reviews would greatly appreciated, both on content, writing and if possible a ca. score.


In todays society Technology can be found almost anywhere form mobile phones, compeuters, cars, to massive equipment used in farming or factories. It is almost impossible to aviod, but are we to dependant on it? Some will argue that we are and that some of these changes a not beneficial.

Take cell-phones for instance, they are so develloped that they can be used to much more than a simple phonecall. They can send messeges, play games, write and recieve emails and acess internet sites such as Facebook. Facebook allows People to stay in touch With distant friends and family, and be updatet in the social loop. For some people this social aspect is so important that they check their Facebook often - even when driving a car, which present a danger to all trafficants.

On the other hand take the industrial revolution in agriculture. Having the opportuneties to use big machines to sow and harest crops more efficiently, give us the opportunety to produce enough food to feed the people. Imagine producing food for millions of people with horse and carrige.

Thechnology gives humans oppotunities to live their lives more efficiently. Wether it is to stay in touch with distant relatives or efficiently farm the land. Altho some of these things brings up issues of eks roadsafty, history shows us the great opportunities and progress thechnology can bring.

[jaypatel]

1. Lots of spelling mistakes.
2. the essay was below the 250 words. Therefore, the answer will be penalized.
3. The capital letter should be used only in the beginning of the sentence, I and for names only.
4. Never ask a question in your essay. It is not considered as academic.