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Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as software, DVDs or videos. Do you agree or disagree?
Public libraries serve as a center of storing books, journals and magazines that are related to various domains, like history, science, arts, architecture and technology and nowadays most of the nations have modernized their libraries by rendering them with modern and digital technology media, which not only assist people to have quick access to specific information they need, but also display videos through DVDs or computers. Nonetheless, In my opinion, public libraries should not contain hi-tech media.

To begin with, digital media is high-priced and this will bring extra cost. As a result, high budget will be needed to advance public libraries. For instance, purchasing DVDs and software, computers and laptops, in large amount for the public libraries are not inexpensive. In addition to this, extra space is required to accommodate them in libraries. Meanwhile, operators should be kept for these media to handle them. That is why, public libraries should not contain such media.
Secondly, when most people are surfing on internet through computer, their mind is diverted from reading. As a result, they get involved in unnecessary searching. For example, even entering into the study sites on internet, brings more advertisement with themselves. These promotions are mainly on shopping and upcoming fashions and every person desires to follow such fashions, which may also lead to unneeded shopping. Moreover students may indulge in pornography or watching movies online which will ultimately destroy their future and beliefs.
Taking these points into consideration, I would say that digital libraries benefit slightly and they are helpful to get quick access to your query but their drawbacks outweigh over advantages , as they are expensive , necessitate more space and operators and people are hard to focus on study . Therefore hi-tech media should not include in public libraries.

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Many people think that public libraries should only provide books and should not waste their money on expensive hi-tech media, such as software, DVDs or videos. Do you agree or disagree?

Public libraries serve as a center for storing books, journals and magazines that are related to various subjects, like history, science, arts, architecture and technology. Nowadays, many nations have modernized their libraries by rendering them with modern and digital technology media, which not only assist people to gain quick access to specific information they need, but also display videos through DVDs or computers. Nonetheless, in my opinion, public libraries should not contain hi-tech media.

To begin with, digital media is expensive. As a result, a large budget will be needed to improve public libraries. For instance, purchasing DVDs and software, computers and laptops in large amounts for public libraries is not cheap. In addition to this, extra space is required to accommodate the equipment. Meanwhile, operators should be kept for these media to handle them.(<--Reword to: "Also, librarians need to be trained in their use so they can help people when needed.") That is why public libraries should not contain such media.

Secondly, when most people are surfing the internet, their mind is diverted from reading. As a result, they get involved in unnecessary searching. For example, even accessing study sites online means the user is subjected to advertisements and distractions. These promotions are mainly for products and upcoming fashions, which may also lead to unnecessary shopping. Moreover students may indulge in pornography or watching movies online which will ultimately destroy their future and beliefs.

Taking these points into consideration, I would say that digital libraries benefit slightly and they are helpful to get quick access to important information, but their drawbacks outweigh their advantages as they are expensive, necessitate more space and operators, and people are distracted when using them. Therefore hi-tech media should not be included in public libraries.