TASK2 & TASK1

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TASK 2
It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
It is vital that young children are able to tell right from wrong should they become socially acceptable in the future. While some people suggest punishment as a way of ensuring that kids do the right thing, it is not necessarily a good method of teaching them good values.

Firstly, punishment might hurt a child’s feelings and thereby create negative impact on its heart and soul. Little kids don’t know any better, so grown-ups need to be more forgiving. If a kid does something wrong out of innocence, blindly punishing him or her will only get the child even more confused. For example, if a kid says inappropriate words, a teacher or parent is supposed to tell it that it is not right to say so, to let children truly understand why what they do is wrong. That will be enough, for there is no need for punishment.

Secondly, punishment is not as humane or effective as positive education itself. Teachers and parents had better set good examples for children to follow. Children need proper guidance. Grounding them, or ordering them to stand in a corner is an immoral way of telling them what’s right, for it deprives kids of their bodily freedom and plants the seed of hatred which is not healthy for their growth.

In fact, punishment should be based on reason. It has to be light, and not too harsh. It must serve the purpose of education. For example, a kid who breaks the glass should be asked to replace it. He or she should be encouraged to earn money by helping parents do the housework to get a new piece of glass. This kind of punishment should be promoted for its is reasonable and gentle, while effectively communicating the message that a person should be responsible for the damage he or she does.

In conclusion, generally speaking, punishing children is not something parents and teachers should consider as top priority. Guiding and making the positive message clear to them matter above all else.

TASK1 (Pie charts are attached to this post.)
The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The first pie chart illustrates the percentages of different types of energy use in Australian homes on average. The second one demonstrates the ratio of gas causing greenhouse effect that originates from the kinds of energy use introduced.

A simple glimpse of the first chart reveals that heating takes up the largest part of energy consumption (42%), followed by water heating (30%). Other appliances consume 15% of the overall energy. Furthermore, refrigeration, lighting, and cooling all have a minor role to play as sources of energy use.

A look at the second chart tells that water heating does a great contribution to greenhouse gas emissions as 32% of the gas comes from it. The second biggest gas producer is other appliances (28%). The most prominent consumer of energy, heating, however, only makes up 15% of gas emissions. Cooling is the smallest factor in both energy consumption and greenhouse gas making.
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Please feel free to bash my writing.

I haven't practiced for a long time. Finished this writing practice in a hurry.
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DcalmdownD wrote:TASK 2
It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
It is vital that young children are able to tell right from wrong so that they become socially acceptable in the future. While some people suggest punishment as a way of ensuring that kids do the right thing, it is not necessarily a good method of teaching them good values.

Firstly, punishment might hurt a child’s feelings and thereby create negative impact on its heart and soul. Little kids don’t know any better, so grown-ups need to be more forgiving. If a kid does something wrong out of innocence, blindly punishing him or her will only get the child even more confused. For example, if a kid says inappropriate words, a teacher or parent is supposed to tell them that it is not right to use those words to help children truly understand why that behavior is wrong. That will be enough, for there is no need for punishment.

Secondly, punishment is not as humane or effective as positive education itself. Teachers and parents should set good examples for children to follow. Children need proper guidance. Grounding them, or ordering them to stand in a corner is an immoral way of telling them what’s right, as it deprives kids of their bodily freedom and plants the seed of hatred which is not healthy for their growth.

In fact, punishment should be based on reason. It has to be light, and not too harsh. It must serve the purpose of education. For example, a kid who breaks a glass should be asked to replace it. He or she should be encouraged to earn money by helping their parents do the housework to get a new glass. This kind of punishment should be promoted for it is reasonable and gentle, while effectively communicating the message that a person should be responsible for the damage he or she does.

In conclusion, generally speaking, punishing children is not something parents and teachers should consider as top priority. Guiding and making the positive message clear to them matters above all else.
Really well written. Great job!
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DcalmdownD wrote: TASK1 (Pie charts are attached to this post.)
The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The first pie chart illustrates the percentages of different types of energy use in Australian homes on average. The second pie chart demonstrates the ratio of greenhouse gas emissions originating from the different kinds of energy used.

A simple glance at the first chart reveals that heating takes up the largest part of energy consumption (42%), followed by water heating (30%). Other appliances consume 15% of the overall energy used. Furthermore, refrigeration, lighting, and cooling all have minor roles to play as sources of energy use.

A look at the second chart shows that water heating makes the greatest contribution to greenhouse gas emissions as 32%. The second biggest gas producer is other appliances (28%). The most prominent consumer of energy, heating, however, only makes up 15% of gas emissions. Cooling is the smallest factor in both energy consumption and greenhouse gas making.
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The academic words should be used to achieve the high score.
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