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Pie chart shows different means of transportation in the Edmonton. On the other hand, table provides the reason the usage of the cars.

According to the Pie chart, 45% people uses cars for transportation. The ratio of the usage of Light Rail Transit is less than 10% as compared to the usage of car. Buses and Taxis are served by the 10% of people which is the least percentage.

Table says, Going to work, Taking children back from school and for going to business are the top three usage of the cars. Other type of the consumption of the cars are leisure activities and shopping, both are used by 15% of the people. 55% of people used car for commuting to work which is leaded by business. After that cars are mostly served for taking children to school with 40%. The 15% of cars are used for shopping and leisure activities by the individuals.

Overall, people in Edmonton make good use of alternative methods of transport but there is a heavy dependence on cars for work.

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Pie chart shows different means of transportation in the Edmonton.(<--Reword to: "The pie chart shows different means of transportation used in Edmonton, while the table provides information on why people prefer using a car.") On the other hand, table provides the reason the usage of the cars.(<--Delete this sentence.)

According to the pie chart, 45% of people use cars for transportation. The ratio of the usage of Light Rail Transit is less than 10% as compared to the usage of car.(<--Reword to: "The next most popular method of transport is Light Rail Transit, preferred by 35% of people in Edmonton.") Buses and Taxis are used by 10% of people respectively.

The table shows that going to work, taking children to school and for business are the top three reasons people use cars at 55%, 40% and 45% respectively. Other reasons to own a car include leisure activities and shopping, accounting for 15% of the people each. 55% of people used car for commuting to work which is leaded by business.(<--Delete this sentence.) After that cars are mostly served for taking children to school with 40%.(<--Delete this sentence.) The 15% of cars are used for shopping and leisure activities by the individuals.(<--Delete this sentence.)
(The last three sentences are repeating what you have already said. They are unnecessary.)

Overall, people in Edmonton make good use of alternative methods of transport but there is a heavy dependence on cars for work.