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Topic: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages if this overweight the disadvantages?
To learn a foreign language is an unavoidable demand of today for a better future. But, where to start from, Is a matter of debate. There are potential advantages of learning a foreign language while there are some disadvantages too.
To begin with, out of all the benefits, learning a language other than mother tangh at primary level is get benefit by quick adaptation power of a young child. At early age a children is more capable to cope up with anything new or different. As no other matter or subject is essential at primary level, they can easily grasp another language. In contrast, it can be a huge pressure for a young one to expose to another one when he/she is not properly being expert with his/her basic one. Sometimes, it can be a barrier to properly acknowledge the primary one. At the same time parents are also find it difficult or confusing.
On the other hand, the process of learning foreign language stats in secondary level may be supplemented by the student’s maturity and advance level of learning skill. This benefit gets in to doubt when a pupil does not feel equal or more interest for another language as he/she is sufficiently able to communicate with the basic language.
To conclude, learning a language is a matter of building a skill which become more effective when it is well practiced. So, the benefits of become exposed to another language at early age can help one to be the expert of it at later stage.

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Topic: Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.
Do the advantages if this overweight the disadvantages?

To learn a foreign language is an unavoidable demand of today for a better future. But where to start from Is a matter of debate.(<--Reword to: "However, the age at which a foreign language should be learned is a matter of debate.") There are potential advantages of learning a foreign language at a young age while there are some disadvantages too.

To begin with, learning a language other than one's mother tongue at primary level means using the quick adaptation power of a young child. At an early age a child is more able to cope with new or different experiences. As no other matter or subject is essential at primary level, they can easily grasp another language. In contrast, it can be a huge struggle for a child to be exposed to another language when he is not comfortable with his native language. Sometimes, this can be a barrier to learning either language. At the same time, parents are also find it difficult or confusing.

On the other hand, the process of learning a foreign language starts in secondary level and may be supplemented by the student’s maturity and advanced level of learning skill. This benefit becomes doubtful when a pupil does not feel equal or more interest in another language as he/she is sufficiently able to communicate with the native language.

To conclude, learning a language is a matter of building a skill which becomes more effective when it is well practiced. So, the benefits of being exposed to another language at an early age can help one to be an expert in it at a later stage.

word count: 286