Academic Writing Task 1

[asadurk]

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

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Response

Given bar-chart shows the subject wise success percentage in the high school competency exams in the period of 2010 to 2011.

Students got best result in the computer science, mathematics and foreign languages; which includes French, German and Spanish. Moreover, the performance of the both gender in the subjects like, Physics, history, foreign languages and mathematics are almost same. Girls got slightly better result, with maximum 2.5% percent in the history.

In the chemistry, the success rate of girls compared to boys is relatively high, that is about 16%. Similarly, girls also perform best in computer science with success rate of 56.3%, which constitutes about 14% difference with boys. Geography is the only subject in which passing rate of male students are more than female counterpart. 30.4% boy candidates successfully cleared high school competency exam, while female candidates cleared 20.1%, which is about 10% less than male students.

Overall, the result shows that the passing rate of female candidate is marginally high than male candidates.

[Flick]

The bar chart below shows the percentage of students who passed their high school competency exams, by subject and gender, during the period 2010-2011.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

test.png

Response

Given bar-chart shows the subject wise success percentage in the high school competency exams in the period of 2010 to 2011.(<--Reword to: "The bar chart shows the percentage of students who passed their high school exams, based on subject and gender for the 2010-2011 academic year.")

Students got best result in the computer science, mathematics and foreign languages; which includes French, German and Spanish.(<--Reword to: "The highest pass rate for both genders was in Computer Science, Mathematics and Foreign Languages.") Moreover, the performance of both genders in Physics, History, Foreign Languages and Mathematics is almost the same. Girls got slightly better result, with maximum 2.5% percent in the history.(<--Reword to: "However, in history, girls performed slightly better, with a 25.6% pass rate, while boys had a 22.9% pass rate.")

In the chemistry, the success rate of girls compared to boys is relatively high, that is about 16%.(<--Reword to: "For chemistry, girls had a significantly higher pass rate than boys, 30.2% and 14.1% respectively.") Similarly, girls also perform best in computer science with success rate of 56.3%, which constitutes about 14% difference with boys.(<--Reword to: "Similarly, in computer science the pass rate for girls was 56.3% but only 42.1% for boys.") Geography is the only subject in which passing rate of male students are more than female counterpart.(<--Reword to: "Geography is the only subject showing the opposite trend, with the pass rate for boys being 30.4% and for girls only 20.1%.") 30.4% boy candidates successfully cleared high school competency exam, while female candidates cleared 20.1%, which is about 10% less than male students.(<--Delete this sentence.)

Overall, the result shows that the passing rate of female candidates is marginally high than male candidates.

[vinitm]

Thankyou asadurk for posting your answer and thankyou flick for evaluation of the same. It really helped.