Writing task 1- Parenthood trends in Australia

[MissIvy]

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The inforgraphic shows current parenthood trends for all Australians births, Australian births to mothers under the age of 25 and Australian family composition. The overall data illustrates the vast majority of all births are to married couples.

The percentage of births to unmarried mothers who are under 25 years old is 72%. This is significantly bigger than the percentage of births to married couples under the age of 25, 28%. It appears as though two third, 66%, of all Australian births is recorded to married couples and the rest, 34% is to unmarried couples.
Children under 15 years of age who live in couple family accounts for the lion’s share of the data, 83%. A figure of 15% was recorded for lone mother family and an insignificant part of 2% is made up by lone father family. The infograph also shows the average age of Australian mothers giving birth to their first child is 30.7 years old. The trend seen in all data in the infograph is expected to continue into the foreseeable future.

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The infographic shows current parenthood trends for all Australians births, Australian births to mothers under the age of 25, and Australian family composition. The overall data illustrates the vast majority of all births are to married couples.

The percentage of births to unmarried mothers who are under 25 years old is 72%. This is significantly larger than the percentage of births to married couples under the age of 25, 28%. It appears as though two thirds, 66%, of all Australian births is to married couples and the rest, 34%, is to unmarried couples.

Children under 15 years of age who live in a couple family accounts for the lion’s share of the data, 83%. A figure of 15% was recorded for lone mother families, and an insignificant number of 2% makes up lone father families. The infographic also shows the average age of Australian mothers giving birth to their first child is 30.7 years old. The trend seen in all data in the infographic is expected to continue into the foreseeable future.