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Topic: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Child's upbringing is such an interesting phenomenon that a minor aspect may play the most vital role in creating a viable adult. Taking this into account, both parents and schools strive to provide a child with the proper guidance. However, one of the most abstract questions arising in the process of upbringing is whether competition or cooperation determines the better future for a growing individual. In fact, there is a distinct difference of opinion when it comes to this question.
On the one hand, some people are truly convinced that engaging a child in different contents will trigger a sense of competition which in turn will lead to more prosperous life. In other words, children constantly competing with their peers tend to regard victory over everything else. Although it may seem to be disapproving, some parents believe that this is the only way to adjust their children to a tough world by revealing them the truth that objectives are attained as a result of struggling for success. A relevant example would be the most prominent chess player of all the time, Garry Kasparov. When Garry was born in Azerbaijan in 1963 his parents had already intended to give him to a chess class. Prior to turning 8 he had won a couple of local competitions, when he turned 15 he was number player both among junior and senior players in Asia. As an outcome of participating in various contests, he became the youngest world champion ever in 1985. As clearly indicated here, competition is essential in developing a strong sense of victory in a child.
On the contrary, the equal numbers of people hold a quite different opinion, since they argue that instead of negatively programming a child to be the best under any circumstances, it is more righteous to encourage a team work. Indeed, the notable reason is that children enjoying collaboration with others are often more sociable, abundant and optimistic, as they undergo both success and failure together with the team. Despite being lower achievers than their competitive counterparts, these individuals often end up finding their place in the society effortlessly as a result of satisfaction and pleasure derived from cooperation with diverse people. Take the most cooperative type of sport, football for instance. Edson Arantes Pele as the greatest footballer in the world stood out with his willingness to support his team since his early childhood. When he joined Brazilian national football team his cooperative skills that he had enhanced throughout his life made him an effective leader of his team. Since Pele’s accomplishments are mainly attributed to his collaborative abilities, this is vivid why so many parents inspire their children to be a part of the team.
To conclude briefly, there are reasonable arguments emerging from both viewpoints, as cooperation and competitiveness are proven to have considerable benefits. As for me, however, because the cooperation seems to be more spirit-based tool, while competitiveness is on the contrary ego based approach; I mostly gravitate towards encouraging children to work with the team.
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Wayfarer wrote:Topic: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

A child's upbringing is such an interesting phenomenon that a minor aspect may play the most vital role in creating a viable adult. Taking this into account, both parents and schools strive to provide a child with the proper guidance. However, one of the most abstract questions arising in the process of raising a child is whether competition or cooperation determines the better future for a growing individual. In fact, there is a distinct difference of opinion when it comes to this question.

On the one hand, some people are truly convinced that engaging a child in different subjects will trigger a sense of competition which in turn will lead to a more prosperous life. In other words, children constantly competing with their peers tend to regard victory over everything else. Although it may seem to be disapproving, some parents believe that this is the only way to adjust their children to a tough world by revealing to them the truth that objectives are attained as a result of struggling for success. A relevant example would be the most prominent chess player of all the time, Garry Kasparov. When Garry was born in Azerbaijan in 1963, his parents already intended to enrol him in a chess class. Prior to turning 8 he had won a couple of local competitions. When he turned 15 he was major player both among junior and senior players in Asia. As an outcome of participating in various contests, he became the youngest world champion ever in 1985. As clearly indicated here, competition is essential in developing a strong sense of victory in a child.

On the contrary, equal numbers of people hold a quite different opinion, since they argue that instead of negatively programming a child to be the best under any circumstances, it is more righteous to encourage team work. A notable reason for this is that children enjoying collaboration with others are often more sociable, abundant and optimistic, as they experience both success and failure together with the team. Despite being lower achievers than their competitive counterparts, these individuals often end up finding their place in society effortlessly as a result of satisfaction and pleasure derived from cooperation with diverse people. Take the most cooperative type of sport, football, for instance. Edson Arantes Pele stood out with his willingness to support his team since his early childhood. When he joined the Brazilian national football team, his cooperative skills that he had enhanced throughout his life made him an effective leader of his team. Since Pele’s accomplishments are mainly attributed to his collaborative abilities, it is clear why so many parents encourage their children to be a part of the team.

To conclude briefly, there are reasonable arguments emerging from both viewpoints, as cooperation and competitiveness are proven to have considerable benefits. As for me, however, because cooperation seems to be a more spirit-based tool, while competitiveness is, on the contrary, ego based; I gravitate towards encouraging children to work with the team.
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