Please critique my speaking which is about environmental problem

[abbasazarmehrput]

Describe a critical environmental problem in your country

what it is

how it affects your society

what solutions you have in mind for that

[Dr.Khurram]

Lot of pauses otherwise good use of vocabulary.

[lmoore]

Hello, abbasazarmehrput,
Thank you for sharing your ideas about the solutions you have for the air pollution in your country. You have some pretty innovative thoughts about it.
First, what stood out most to me in your speech was your vocabulary. Here are some of the words I heard that are high-level: industrialization, pollutants, detrimental, hazardous, densely populated, ramifications, combating, alleviating. One word I thought I heard you say was “airbornes.” I think you were looking for “air-borne pollutants.” “Airbornes” isn’t a word as far as I am aware.
You used some transition words and phrases, such as “in addition,” which helped link your ideas together. I would encourage you to use more of them. Your conclusion was quite good as well. You recapped your ideas in a succinct way.
As far as pronunciation goes, watch out for the /th/ sound. You seem to say it as a /d/. Make sure your tongue is between your teeth when you say this sound.
Here are a couple of other notes:

Encourage people to use to practice carpooling – encourage people to practice carpooling
Borrowed by citizens of community – of THE community
Best wishes as you continue to practice!