Task 1 for assessment. Pls assess and give bandscore. Tnx!

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Cherry dizon
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Task 1 for assessment. Pls assess and give bandscore. Tnx!

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The table illustrates how much of a cafe's products were sold on an average day of a week. The number of sales varies mildy between different hours of the day.

Starting from 7:30 in the morning until 10:30, pastries were already a hit to customers as 275 pieces were bought. Coffee was almost as popular as the latter as it was only ten figures behind at 265 with tea at only 110. Buyers were not yet up for sandwiches as it was the least bought food at 50.

It can be seen that between 10:30am and 2:30pm, the sandwiches, being the least demanded product in the first three hours since opening, skyrocketed to 200 as the most sought out food. Coffee is still second in line at 185, followed by pastries at 95. The least bought beverage was tea at only 50.

In the afternoon, around 2:30pm to 5:30pm, the numbers of pastry and coffee bought were roughly the same at 150 and 145, respectively. The purchases made on sandwiches took a sudden plunge at 40 while tea was recorded at only 35, the lowest number of sales made on this item for the whole day.

On the last three hours of the day, 5:30pm to 8:30pm, coffee hit the top spot at 200. Another significant increase on the sales of sandwiches can be noted during this time of day at 110. Pastries and tea were not too far behind at 80 and 75, respectively.
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Re: Task 1 for assessment. Pls assess and give bandscore. Tnx!

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Hello again!

The description is good but you haven't included an overview or summary of the data.

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Re: Task 1 for assessment. Pls assess and give bandscore. Tnx!

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Thank you so much for your response! Here is my revised answer. Is it worth a bandscore of 7? Thank you. :D

The table illustrates how much of a cafe's products were sold on an average day of a week. The number of sales appears to vary mildy between different hours of the day with coffee being sold constantly. In order of popularity, pastries came in second followed by sandwich and tea respectively.

Starting from 7:30 in the morning until 10:30, pastries were already a hit to customers as 275 pieces were bought. Coffee was almost as popular as the latter as it was only ten figures behind at 265 with tea at only 110. Buyers were not yet up for sandwiches as it was the least bought food at 50.

It can be seen that between 10:30am and 2:30pm, the sandwiches, being the least demanded product in the first three hours since opening, skyrocketed to 200 as the most sought out food. Coffee is still second in line at 185, followed by pastries at 95. The least bought beverage was tea at only 50.

In the afternoon, around 2:30pm to 5:30pm, the numbers of pastry and coffee bought were roughly the same at 150 and 145, respectively. The purchases made on sandwiches took a sudden plunge at 40 while tea was recorded at only 35, the lowest number of sales made on this item for the whole day.

On the last three hours of the day, 5:30pm to 8:30pm, coffee hit the top spot at 200. Another significant increase on the sales of sandwiches can be noted during this time of day at 110. Pastries and tea were not too far behind at 80 and 75, respectively.
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