Topic on happiness - Task 2 - Please kindly assess. Many Thanks!

[xia]

Write about the following topic:
- Happiness is considered very important in life.
- Why is it difficult to define?
- What factors are important in achieving happiness?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experienced.

As we all know, happiness is an abstract concept, so it is hard to define accurately. We often say we are happy when we have a feeling that we use the word "happiness" to describe. And we can often benefit a lot in the following hours from happiness. That is the reason why happiness is considered very important in life.

Happiness is a feeling that has lots of effects on our body. Generally, it makes us relaxed so that we can have a peaceful mind to do other things. Once we feel happy to communicate with others, happiness will be easily delivered to them at the same time. And particularly, we are usually encouraged by happiness, which means we are more confident and motivated to do almost everything.

Although happiness does have many advantages, achieving that is still not an easy job. Firstly, we should have a strong willingness in our life. Every kind of happiness is growing in a healthy body and mind, so we should build a strong faith. Secondly, we should do more things with others, because happiness can be infected and we may be so lucky to get it from others. Thirdly, we are better to do something fun to make ourselves happy. Last but not least, we can initiate to change our thoughts by thinking about happy things to encourage ourselves. We vary from individual to individual, thus only ourselves know us best. For example, we are unhappy because of our poor academic performance one day. We can just not think about this, and it is the quickest solution in that we know the reason of our unhappiness.

Overall, happiness is really beneficial to our life, and can make things efficient. What's more, it not hard to achieve. Why not be happy?

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

The introduction actually answers the first question, so should be the first main paragraph. When it comes to the second question, I agree with your points, but you do not develop them.

I like the final question that you pose. Yes, if happiness is so easy to achieve, as you suggest, why aren't more people happy?

All the best,
David