Task2-argument-teach children to be a good parent at school

[rairaichan0115]

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent.
Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.


Nowadays there are many juveniles to become parents when they are still very young. Some people suggested schools to enlighten them how to be a good parent such as how to change nappy, breastfeeding, taking care of babies when they are sick as well as teaching them a right concept to them. All of these skills are necessary for the offspring to be a good father or mother. I personally agreed that it is a splendid idea to educate them it in their earlier life. There are two primary reasons for this.

Firstly, it is an undeniable fact that teaching them how to be a good father or mother can increase their sense of responsibilities. To illustrate, the school can make a role play with pupils and teach them how to take care of an infant and what they have to do with the baby during a day. This makes it clear that students will accurately realize how much onuses they have to take when they are having a baby. Moreover, although I certainly agree that they may not fully understand their responsibilities because of they are not mature enough. Nonetheless, I contend that this course can offer them a proper basic concept.

Secondly, and even more importantly, this curriculum can raise their sense of respect of their parents. As they can comprehend how much their parents love them and look after them through this class. Admittedly, not all the fathers or mothers are fully taking their mandatory responsibilities of their children. Hence, some of schoolchildren may not have empathy. Teachers may need to arrange other classes for them in order to give them a right concept. It is obvious from this that the course is benefited to the students along with their parents too.

In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that the educating offspring how to be a good parent at schools has more pros than cons. Also, I believe that it seems highly advisable for the government to invest more financial incentives to those schools which are holding these courses.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello again!

Quite good overall. You only briefly mentioned why young people might not learn this at home.
Grammar is generally good, with a mix of structures, and vocab is good too.

Well done!
David

[Flick]

Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent.
Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent.


Nowadays there are many juveniles who become parents when they are still very young. Some people suggested schools teach them how to be a good parent such as how to change nappies, breastfeed, take care of babies when they are sick as well as teaching them about safe sex. All of these skills are necessary for the person to be a good father or mother. I personally agree that it is a splendid idea to educate them in their earlier life. There are two primary reasons for this.

Firstly, it is an undeniable fact that teaching them how to be a good father or mother can increase their sense of responsibility. To illustrate, the school can make a role play with pupils and teach them how to take care of an infant and what they have to do with the baby during the day. This will help students to accurately realize how much onus they have to take on when they are having a baby. Moreover, I certainly agree that they may not fully understand their responsibilities because they are not mature enough. Nonetheless, I contend that this course can offer them a basic knowledge .

Secondly, and even more importantly, this curriculum can raise their sense of respect for their parents. As they can comprehend how much their parents love them and look after them through this class. Admittedly, not all fathers or mothers fulfill their mandatory responsibilities for their children. Hence, some schoolchildren may not have empathy. Teachers may need to arrange other classes for them in order to give them a better understanding. It is obvious from this that the course is beneficial to the students along with their parents.

In conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that educating offspring on how to be a good parent at schools has more pros than cons. Also, I believe that it is highly advisable for the government to invest more financial incentives to those schools which are holding these courses.