Writing task 2. Thanks!

[davide88]

More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

What is your opinion?
Do you think rich countries should pay poorer countries for the people they encourage to come?
What other measures could rich countries take to encourage qualified people to stay and help develop their own countries?




It is common today to hear about a ‘brain drain’ from developing countries to developed countries. This can be seen in the migration of young specialists that after graduation leave their countries to work in richer ones. It is agreed that, by encouraging this ‘brain drain’ of skilled professionals, rich countries don’t help poorer countries in their development process. Thus, they should reward poor countries or encourage young professionals to not leave their own countries.

Firstly, rich countries often exploit poorer countries by ‘stealing’ their young specialists. For example, richer countries benefit from specialists who have been trained at expense of other countries. This example clearly shows that often rich countries take advantage of poorer countries. For this reason, it is believed that richer countries should reward poorer ones handing over a percentage of the tax payed by foreign workers to their native countries.

Moreover, richer countries could stop this ‘brain drain’ by stimulating young professionals to work in their native countries. This could be done by investing in poorer countries with the creation of companies wich should employee only local specialists. This could be useful for both rich and poor countries, representing for the former a form of investment and for the latter an opportunity for development.

Thus, rich countries should not exploit poor countries by stealing their specialists. It has been shown that there are ways in which developed countries can help poor countries by rewarding them for the professionals who come to work in their countries or by creating companies in poorer countries. In a more and more globalized world it is expected that professionals will continue to leave their countries and work abroad. Also, it’s hoped that in this process poor countries will be helped.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello Davide!

Introduction - Good. 'It is agreed that' - who by?

First main paragraph - The idea is interesting, but do you really think that all those people are going to the USA and Europe because the Western governments are encouraging them? Examples!

Second main paragraph - True. There is also the simpler method of banning foreigners from going to wealthy countries to work or study!

Conclusion - You say 'It has been shown', so I think an example is required.

Overall, some interesting points, but I don't find the essay very convincing, mainly due to a lack of evidence/examples. Always develop points!

All the best,
David

[davide88]

thanks for your reply. This is the first time I write a writing task essay. I have to work more on examples!

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More and more qualified people are moving from poor to rich countries to fill vacancies in specialist areas like engineering, computing and medicine. Some people believe that by encouraging the movement of such people rich countries are stealing from poor countries. Others feel that this is only part of the natural movement of workers around the world.

What is your opinion?
Do you think rich countries should pay poorer countries for the people they encourage to come?
What other measures could rich countries take to encourage qualified people to stay and help develop their own countries?


It is common today to hear about a ‘brain drain’ from developing countries to developed countries. This can be seen in the migration of young specialists that leave their countries to work in richer ones after graduation . It is agreed that, by encouraging this ‘brain drain’ of skilled professionals, rich countries don’t help poorer countries in their development process. Thus, they should reward poor countries or encourage young professionals to not leave their own countries.

Firstly, rich countries often exploit poorer countries by ‘stealing’ their young specialists. For example, richer countries benefit from specialists who have been trained at the expense of other countries. This example clearly shows that often rich countries take advantage of poorer countries. For this reason, it is believed that richer countries should reward poorer ones by handing over a percentage of the tax paid by foreign workers to their native countries.

Moreover, richer countries could stop this ‘brain drain’ by encouraging young professionals to work in their native countries. This could be done by investing in poorer countries with the creation of companies which should employee only local specialists. This could be useful for both rich and poor countries, representing for the former a form of investment and for the latter an opportunity for development.

Thus, rich countries should not exploit poor countries by stealing their specialists. It has been shown that there are ways in which developed countries can help poor countries by rewarding them for the professionals who come to work in their countries or by creating companies in poorer countries. In a more and more globalized world it is expected that professionals will continue to leave their countries and work abroad. Also, it’s hoped that in this process poor countries will be helped.