To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world.Please David have a look . Thank you!

[Mislav11]

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel.
What is your opinion on the above assumption?

It has been suggested that raising the price of fuel would help to decrease the chances of damaging the environment through toxic emissions. Although the this action might contribute to the declined use of fuel , that would not solve the issue of jeopardising the environment.

Firstly, to assert that higher prices for fuel is a solution to the problem of increasing possibilities of the disastrous events which might hit the environment , is incorrect.Increased prices would not stop people using cars, or factories ceasing the usage of toxic fuels. A more probable event would be that increased prices will negatively affect the overall productivity as the cost of production would become unfeasible. Consequently that would cause the growth of unemployment and the conventional input for the power supply would stay unchanged.Therefore, I hold the view that the focus in solving this particular problem should be on finding alternative sources of energy to keep industry active and environmentally harmless.

With reference to the above-mentioned idea of the use of alternative types of energy, I will provide a possible solution. Evidently, society has already found the way to exploit energy from sources such as the wind, the sun and the tide, which don’t have any detrimental effect on the environment. Moreover, it is proven that those sources are able to provide significantly greater amounts of energy than that provided by petrol or gas. For instance, the proportion of solar energy reaching the surface of the planet is so vast that in one year it is approximately twice as much as will ever be obtained from all of the Earth’s non-renewable resources of oil, coal or natural gas.

To sum up, while the process of developing technology which will succeed in bringing about the use of alternative sources of energy to a profitable level might be expensive, in the long run it would be the practical solution to avoid environmental hazards. On the contrary, the action of increasing prices of fuel would act more as an unproductive punishment than the solution.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

I like your first main paragraph. I'm not sure about 'unfeasible' (= too extreme).

Alternative energy sources DO have a detrimental effect on the environment. Most environmentalists fail to take into account the resources required to build wind turbines, tidal power stations and solar cells. The latter part of the paragraph is good.

Overall, a good essay, but more precision in the answer would make it a VERY good essay. Be sure to use vocabulary and grammar precisely for a high score.

All the best,
David

[Flick]

To solve the ever-increasing environmental hazards throughout the world, the best way is to increase the price of fuel.
What is your opinion on the above assumption?

It has been suggested that raising the price of fuel would help to lower the impact of toxic emissions on the environment. Although this action might contribute to the declined use of fue, it would not solve the issue of current damage to the environment.

Firstly, to assert that higher prices for fuel is a solution to the problem of increasing possibilities of the disastrous events which might hit the environment , is incorrect.(<--Reword to: "Firstly, to assert that higher fuel prices will reduce environmental hazards is incorrect.") Increased prices would not stop people using cars, or factories cease the usage of toxic fuels. A more probable event would be that increased prices would negatively affect overall productivity as the cost of production would increase significantly. Consequently, that would cause the growth of unemployment while the conventional input for power supply would remain unchanged. Therefore, I hold the view that the focus in solving this particular problem should be on finding alternative sources of energy to keep industries active and environmentally harmless.

With reference to the above-mentioned idea of the use of alternative types of energy, I will provide a possible solution. Evidently, society has already found the way to exploit energy from sources such as the wind, the sun and the tide, which don’t have any detrimental effect on the environment. Moreover, it is proven that those sources are able to provide significantly greater amounts of energy than that provided by petrol or gas. For instance, the proportion of solar energy reaching the surface of the planet is so vast that in one year it is approximately twice as much as will ever be obtained from all of the Earth’s non-renewable resources of oil, coal or natural gas.

To sum up, while the process of developing technology which will succeed in bringing about the use of alternative sources of energy to a profitable level might be expensive, in the long run this is the practical solution to avoid environmental hazards. Meanwhile, the action of increasing fuel prices would act more as an unproductive punishment than a solution.