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Rich countries should help poorer countries. Agree or disagree?
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One of the biggest challenge the under developed economies faces today for the sustainability is due to unavailability of funds and not effective utilization of the resources. However, rich countries can offer some help in making the progression for those countries.
People are migrating from poor countries due to various factors like unfavorable climatic conditions, lack of the job opportunities and political discrimination. However, rich countries should assist these countries in growing their economy. For instance, having bilateral trades with these countries and making some investment which can help in creating more business opportunities for the local people or by permitting those migrants to work in the developing nations. Countries like US, you will find lot of immigrants doing various types of jobs.
Richer countries can help them in providing education to the under-developed countries by exempting or waiving their fees to certain extent. For instance, many colleges in India allow having the MOU (memorandum of understanding) with under-developed economies to study in good colleges which can help them in pursuing some career opportunities and making them self-sufficient.
I strongly believe that rich nations can help in rebuilding these nations as and when required. For instance, a recent natural calamity which stuck at Nepal caused a huge loss, lot of the developing and developed countries like India helped them in providing the immediate assistance in terms of security, food and medical. This will help in reducing the overall employment across the globe.
To conclude, this will only help the poor countries to excel well but also making the world more peacefully and betterment for the humanity.
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Hello!
Some points are unclear and/or undeveloped ...
1. Lack of bilateral trade and investment are usually caused by developing countries, not developed ones.
2. "by permitting those migrants to work in the developing nations" is unclear.
3. The sentence "Countries like US, you will find lot of immigrants doing various types of jobs" does not logically follow from the previous one.
4. The Indian example needs further explanation.
5. "This will help in reducing the overall employment across the globe." Very confusing!!!
6. The conclusion is not supported by your essay.
With some of the aforementioned points, poor grammar and/or vocabulary might be interfering with meaning.
All the best,
David
Some points are unclear and/or undeveloped ...
1. Lack of bilateral trade and investment are usually caused by developing countries, not developed ones.
2. "by permitting those migrants to work in the developing nations" is unclear.
3. The sentence "Countries like US, you will find lot of immigrants doing various types of jobs" does not logically follow from the previous one.
4. The Indian example needs further explanation.
5. "This will help in reducing the overall employment across the globe." Very confusing!!!
6. The conclusion is not supported by your essay.
With some of the aforementioned points, poor grammar and/or vocabulary might be interfering with meaning.
All the best,
David
Re: Please review Task 2 for GT and rate.
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Rich countries should help poorer countries. Agree or disagree?
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One of the biggest challenges under developed economies face today is sustainability due to the lack of funds and not effective utilization of resources. However, rich countries can offer some help to those countries.
People are migrating from poor countries due to various factors like unfavorable climatic conditions, lack of job opportunities and political discrimination. However, rich countries should assist these countries in growing their economy. For instance, having bilateral trade with these countries and investing in local businesses can help in creating more business opportunities for the local people. Alternatively, rich countries could permit migrants from poor countries to work in the rich nations. In countries like the US you will find lot of immigrants doing various types of jobs.
Richer countries can help them by providing cheap or free education to the under-developed countries. For instance, many colleges in India allow the MOU (Memorandum of Understanding) with under-developed economies to study in good colleges which can help them in pursuing career opportunities and making them self-sufficient.
I strongly believe that rich nations can help in improving these nations as and when required. For instance, a recent natural calamity which stuck in Nepal caused a huge loss, and many developing and developed countries like India helped them by providing immediate assistance in terms of security, food and medical aid. This will help in reducing overall unemployment across the globe.
To conclude, this will not only help poor countries to excel but will also make the world more peaceful.
Rich countries should help poorer countries. Agree or disagree?
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One of the biggest challenges under developed economies face today is sustainability due to the lack of funds and not effective utilization of resources. However, rich countries can offer some help to those countries.
People are migrating from poor countries due to various factors like unfavorable climatic conditions, lack of job opportunities and political discrimination. However, rich countries should assist these countries in growing their economy. For instance, having bilateral trade with these countries and investing in local businesses can help in creating more business opportunities for the local people. Alternatively, rich countries could permit migrants from poor countries to work in the rich nations. In countries like the US you will find lot of immigrants doing various types of jobs.
Richer countries can help them by providing cheap or free education to the under-developed countries. For instance, many colleges in India allow the MOU (Memorandum of Understanding) with under-developed economies to study in good colleges which can help them in pursuing career opportunities and making them self-sufficient.
I strongly believe that rich nations can help in improving these nations as and when required. For instance, a recent natural calamity which stuck in Nepal caused a huge loss, and many developing and developed countries like India helped them by providing immediate assistance in terms of security, food and medical aid. This will help in reducing overall unemployment across the globe.
To conclude, this will not only help poor countries to excel but will also make the world more peaceful.