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The graph and table illustrate the average temperatures by month and average number of sunny hours annually in London, New York and Sydney.

Overall, during the first half of the year the average temperature drops in Sydney and rises in the other two cities. In contrast, during the second half of the year the same indicator decreases in New York and London and increases in Sydney. At the beginning of the period the highest temperature is recorded in Sydney, and then it is replaced by New York in May and brings back its leadership in October. The temperature patterns in London and New York are quite similar, although the temperature in London is milder without high fluctuations. The number of sunny hours in Sydney and New York is quite the same (approximately 2500 hours), whereas it is more than two times less hours of sunshine in London.

With regards to the average temperature in Sydney, it starts at 25 degrees in January (the highest temperature among the three cities), drops to 15 degrees in July (the lowest temperature among the three cities) and starts to increase from July to December. The opposite tendency is observed in New York and London as the average temperature is below 10 degrees in January and starts to increase till July reaching 30 degrees and about 25 degrees correspondingly. It is followed by steady decrease in average temperatures till the end of the year.
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Hello!

Very good! Nicely organised, all the main points included, very good grammar and vocabulary but ... no summary!

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mkhitaryan wrote:The graph and table illustrate the average temperatures by month and average number of sunny hours annually in London, New York and Sydney.

Overall, during the first half of the year the average temperature drops in Sydney and rises in the other two cities. In contrast, during the second half of the year the temperature decreases in New York and London and increases in Sydney. At the beginning of the period, the highest temperature is recorded in Sydney, 25 degrees Celcius, and then it is replaced by New York in May, at 22 degrees, and takes back its leadership in October at 24 degrees. The temperature patterns in London and New York are quite similar, although the temperature in London is milder without high fluctuations. The number of sunny hours in Sydney and New York is quite similar (approximately 2500 hours), whereas there are over two times fewer hours of sunshine in London with only 1,180 hours.

With regards to the average temperature in Sydney, it starts at 25 degrees in January (the highest temperature among the three cities), drops to 15 degrees in July (the lowest temperature among the three cities) and starts to increase from July to December. The opposite trend is observed in New York and London as the average temperature is below 10 degrees in January and starts to increase till July, reaching 30 degrees and about 25 degrees respectively. It is followed by a steady decrease in average temperatures till the end of the year.
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