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The modern family structure and role of member have changed in the recent years. Do you think it has a negative or positive effect on family? Give opinion and relevant example.
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As the time has evolved, the structure of the family has changed significantly. Education and awareness have played a major contribution in changing it. However, this has brought few positive and negative too which has been discussed below.
Nowadays, everyone prefers to stay in a nuclear family and gradually the concept of joint family is fading away especially in urban world. People are becoming more independent and migrating across the globe in search of fulfilling their dreams. Earlier days, the majority of the decision in the family used to be taken by the elder member of the family but now everyone being educated participates and decides on their future plans by themselves as they know what is best for them. For instance, if a child in a family wants to invest in a property in some new location and add it as an asset for his future then he/she will decide on the ideal time/location considering his/her future plans. It gives them a freedom to express their thoughts and make them more accountable.
On the other side, new family structure brings lot of challenges too. Parents are not able to give attention to their children so much due to the work commitment especially when mother is working. They prefer their career over any other things. Sometimes they become too impulsive on their decision due to lack of experience. For e.g. a new parents really lack experience in handling the new born and ended up using a babysitters or mid-wife to look after. Children are unable to look after their old parents as they in a different society and living standard is different too which at times makes it very difficult for the old people to get acclimatize with.
To conclude, a change is inevitable in the family considering the modern world and one should take it more optimistically as this gives an opportunity for everyone to put across their thoughts and decide accordingly.
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Re: plesase review the GT task 2
Hello!
You've been posting essays long enough to know that you shouldn't use 'everyone'!
Freedom to express their thoughts?
Aside from those two points, the first main paragraph is actually quite good.
The second, however, barely makes sense. In traditional agricultural societies, women have generally done A LOT of work. All parents, when they have their first child, lack parental experience. That's just a straight fact for all people during the whole of history. In the past - and even now - grandparents are frequently used as babysitters.
Overall, reasonably accurate grammar, but not a wide range of structures. Vocabulary is not used effectively.
All the best,
David
You've been posting essays long enough to know that you shouldn't use 'everyone'!
Freedom to express their thoughts?
Aside from those two points, the first main paragraph is actually quite good.
The second, however, barely makes sense. In traditional agricultural societies, women have generally done A LOT of work. All parents, when they have their first child, lack parental experience. That's just a straight fact for all people during the whole of history. In the past - and even now - grandparents are frequently used as babysitters.
Overall, reasonably accurate grammar, but not a wide range of structures. Vocabulary is not used effectively.
All the best,
David