please review my GT task 2

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DJvj
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please review my GT task 2

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Topic :-

education in the financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program ?. to what extent you agree or disagree with this statement.

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One of the biggest challenge the younger generations faces tofday is dealing with their finances. Some people thinks that the financial management should be a required element to have it in the educational system .However, some people are against the notion of this practise.Below is the gist of the argument describing both the aspects.

Learning the finances in the education system would help the younger generation to manage their funds effectively. They should be able to develop a habit of savings at an early age which most of the matured people struggle to do in their lives. For instance, start depositing the money in the piggy banks or having a recurring account.Learning the finances would help them in setting their priorities well and spending wisely. Students should be able to learn it quickly and faster which helps them in understanding the value of money.


On the another side of the argument,financial management in the education system can bring some challenges too. Being a vast area and may create lot of the complexity for students to understand it . Moreover, it would be difficult to enforce it on the students to learn . For instance, a student who is interested in engineering subjects may not be interested in learning it. This will just compel the students to be part of the course without gaining anything. This practice may implicitly affect their studies too . Schools should focus more on the building their concepts stronger.

To conclude, education system shouldn't have any constraint in teaching the financial management for creating the awareness for the students . However, schools shouldn't make this as a mandatory for the students . School's should provide the platform for the students and let students to decide whether they are interested in pursuing it or not.

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DJvj
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Re: please review my GT task 2

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Any thoughts ?.
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Re: please review my GT task 2

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DJvj wrote:Topic :-

education in the financial management should be a mandatory component of the school program ?. to what extent you agree or disagree with this statement.

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One of the biggest challenge the younger generation faces today is dealing with their finances. Some people think that financial management should be a required element of the educational system. However, some people are against this notion. Below is the gist of the argument describing both the aspects.(<--Reword to: "This essay will discuss both viewpoints before coming to a reasoned conclusion.")

Learning finance at school would help the younger generation to manage their funds effectively. They should be able to develop a habit of savings at an early age, which many older people struggle to do in their lives. For instance, start depositing the money in a piggy bank or set up a savings account at a bank. Learning finance would help them in setting their priorities and spending wisely. Students should be able to learn it quickly, which will help them in understanding the value of money.

On the another side of the argument, learning financial management at school can bring some challenges too. Being a vast area, it may be difficult for students to understand it. Moreover, it would be difficult to convince students of its importance. For instance, a student who is interested in engineering subjects may not be interested in finance. This will just compel the students to be part of the course without gaining anything. This practice may implicitly affect their studies, too. Schools should focus more on the building their concepts stronger.(<--I don't understand this sentence.)

To conclude, the education system shouldn't have any constraint in teaching financial management for creating awareness in its students . However, schools shouldn't make this mandatory for the students. Schools should provide the opportunity for the students and let the students decide whether they are interested in pursuing it or not.
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