please review my GT task 2

[DJvj]

Topic :-
The ownership of cars should be restricted to one per family in order to reduce traffic overcrowding and pollution. To what extent do you agree and disagree ?

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Over the period of time , there has been significant growth seen in the number of vehicles on the roads. Some people think this could be done by restricting the number of owned vehicles allowing a vehicle per family . However,some people thinks against this notion of the practice. Below is gist talking about both sides of the argument.

Commutation is the biggest challenge seen by the people in the urban cities.A major cause of traffic clogging is due to the excessive vehicular movement. Gases emits from these vehicles contributes into air pollution which is big hazard for human health.Imposing the restriction will help in reducing the number of the vehicles off the road effectively especially cities like bangalore where volume of vehicles being registered are too high .It will encourage people to opt for a car pooling rather than driving alone to their destination. Parking of vehicles is the biggest concern in the urban areas be at home or public places like shopping malls can be tackled effectively with this approach.

On the another side of the argument, imposing the restriction may increase the dependency among the family members as majority of the people works.Sometimes it would make it difficult to commute especially for the females or senior citizens using public transportation due to unavailability of the direct connectivity. Some People who are affluent or high status class may have to compromise on their comfort levels. People may leave with no choice in case if they would like to upgrade their vehicle without selling their old car.

To conclude, this could be one of the way to reduce the traffic on the roads and pollution . However, it would be a bit challenging for authorities to implement.Instead,authorities should plan in improvising the current infrastructure to scale up and provide an alternate means of public transportation like bullet trains, tramps etc with a good network connectivity.

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Appreciate your feedback

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Commutation?

The first main paragraph is quite good, but the second only covers points very superficially. Vocabulary is reasonable, though there are numerous mistakes (e.g. last sentence of the first main paragraph, which is essentially incomprehensible). Grammatical range is weak, with a limited range of structures, e.g. conditionals?

All the best,
David