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Topic: Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres, while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each?

Sales vary in different ways these days; however, shopping centres and local markets are typical. Some people would rather shop in malls, while many enjoy going around traditional markets. In my opinion, both shopping experiences have several undeniable advantages.

There are three obviously interesting main upsides of purchasing what you want in a shopping centre. Firstly, every buyer could not disagree that this way is convenient and time-saving. A centre including a great deal of smaller stores seems to be a magic box which contains everything. Food, clothing, pet, household appliances and so on, are all found out there. Secondly, it equiped by a huge air-condition system. As a result, this cool environment easily makes the pickiest consumer satisfied while perusing lots of branches. Finally, shopping malls usually have excellent customer service. Therefore, we never have to worry about being in the condition of getting lost or being lack of products' information.

However, a local market is also a good deal with two benefits I will mention below. First of all, the products which are on display in the markets in your neighboorhood are likely to be fresher (compared to frozen or dried food stored in supermarkets). Fresh items are always the best choice for digestion in particular and for health in general. Moreover, you are able to have a chance for a bargain in local markets while the options you choose have the same quality. The cheaper you can have, the more money you can save.

Overall, shopping centres and local markets bring us conflicting benefits. Deciding where to shop depends on your hobby, financial condition and time.


"I know that this is not a strong IELTS writing. So thank you so much for any of your comments to help me improve."

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Topic: Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres, while others prefer local markets. What are the advantages of each?

Sales vary in different ways these days. However, shopping centres and local markets are typical. Some people would rather shop in malls, while many enjoy going around traditional markets. In my opinion, both shopping experiences have several undeniable advantages.

There are three main upsides of purchasing what you want in a shopping centre. Firstly, everyone can agree that this is convenient and time-saving. A centre including a great deal of smaller stores seems to be a magic box which contains everything. Food, clothing, pet goods, household appliances and so on, are all found out there. Secondly, it is equipped with a huge air-conditioning system. As a result, this cool environment easily makes the pickiest consumer satisfied while perusing lots of shops. Finally, shopping malls usually have excellent customer service. Therefore, we never have to worry about being in the condition of getting lost or having a lack of product information.

However, a local market is also a good deal with two benefits I will mention below. First of all, the products which are on display in the markets in your neighboorhood are likely to be fresher (compared to frozen or dried food stored in supermarkets). Fresh items are always the best choice for digestion in particular, and for health in general. Moreover, you may get a bargain in local markets while the options you choose have the same quality. The cheaper you can find, the more money you can save.

Overall, shopping centres and local markets bring us conflicting benefits. Deciding where to shop depends on your hobbies, financial situation, and time.


"I know that this is not a strong IELTS writing. So thank you so much for any of your comments to help me improve."