writing task 2

[nanynany]

hello I am Anna,
I am going to take the IELTS in September and I still have sone problems with the writing part task 2, could you please help me.
thank you so much.

[bIn the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country.
Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad.
what are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.[/b]

As the years goes by the possibilities to study in a foreign country have increased and are increasing allowing young learners to broad their horizons in the world, but sometimes can be hard live alone in an unknown city especially because not everyone is prepared to front a completely new lifestyle.
This essay will analyse upsides and downsides alike of studying abroad.

Firstly, I suppose that having the opportunity to study abroad, thanks to many Government and University partnership,is a significant resource for any student that want explore the world and his study subject in a different perspective.Nowadays loads of University offered a huge number of programs to study in another country and usually with the chance to win a scholarship to afford their short or long stay in there.
Nevertheless, it is not easy to get a scholarship and the students must prove to have specific language or personal skill to demonstrate to deserve it. Additionally, sometimes it can be hard to start living out of our home country because of many different reasons, first of all the language. Even though someone has been studying a language for years talk with native speakers is always a challenge. Moreover homesick of our house, our parents and friends can play a significant role in our choice.
All in all , having studied abroad for almost one year, I must say that this is an experience definitely to do once in a lifetime. In fact spending a period of time far from our belonging and out from our safe space, allow people to grow up faster and I would say better. Basically, our brain opens itself automatically to understand and absorb new information and knowledge just because this is the only way to survive, we can count only on our skills. To sum up , studying abroad is not an easy way to get into our studying but it surely a worth way to get into our life.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello Anna!

broad - broaden, hard TO live

Overall, I think that you have only just managed to answer the question. You make good points, but these are hardly developed at all. For instance, there is nothing about how to get over homesickness or why some people don't suffer much from it.

Grammar is reasonable. I'd like to see more complex structures. Be careful with punctuation, perhaps dividing longer sentences into shorter ones rather than using incorrect commas.

Note that the conclusion is longer than the main paragraphs, supporting my point about lack of development.

All the best,
David

[Flick]

In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country.
Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad.
what are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?
You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

As the years go by, the possibilities to study in a foreign country have increased and are increasing, allowing young learners to broaden their horizons in the world. But sometimes it can be hard to live alone in an unknown city, especially because not everyone is prepared to front a completely new lifestyle.
This essay will analyse the upsides and downsides alike of studying abroad.

Firstly, having the opportunity to study abroad, thanks to many Government and University partnerships, is a significant resource for any student that wants to explore the world and his study subject from a different perspective. Nowadays, loads of universities offer a huge number of programs to study in another country and usually with the chance to win a scholarship to afford their short or long stay there.

Nevertheless, it is not easy to get a scholarship, and the students must prove to have specific language or personal skills to demonstrate that they deserve it. Additionally, sometimes it can be hard to start living out of one's home country because of many different reasons, first of all the language. Even though someone has been studying a language for years, talking with native speakers is always a challenge. Moreover, homesickness and missing parents and friends can play a significant role in the choice.

All in all, having studied abroad for almost one year, I must say that this is an experience definitely to do once in a lifetime. In fact, spending a period of time far from home and away from one's safe space, allows people to grow up faster and I would say better. Basically, the brain opens itself automatically to understand and absorb new information and knowledge just because this is the only way to survive; we can count only on our skills. To sum up, studying abroad is not an easy way to learn, but it is surely a worth way to get into our life.(<--I don't understand this sentence.)

[nanynany]

Thank you so much for your help I will try to do better in my next writing.