Task 2 7+

[Aky]

The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap
and clean energy.
The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?


My response :
The last fifty years have seen a considerable increase in the use of nuclear weapons and power in some parts of the world. Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effects of this nuclear weapons and power have been negative or positive to undercontol the world peace. While there are certainly valid views to the contrary, I personally believe that the drawbacks of the nuclear far outweigh its benefits. Two of primary reasons with this trend are as follows

Initially, this is particularly so given the fact that nuclear weapon is too dangerous tool to be a lasting peace because when the countries utilize it in order to maintain the safety, it can arise problems which are devastatingly bad for the people. Furthermore, in terms of terrorism, these nuclear weapons will damage especially, when terrorists use it to attack and then, they may commit suicide acts which kill a million of people’s live.

Conversely, despite the arguments of some people that nuclear power energy is more affordable than other types of energies. Undoubtedly, this type of energy does harm or produce no smokes to the environment and the public. Moreover, nuclear weapons would be a key factor to grapple with the issue of possible wars. One delicious example of this was conflict between the US and Iraq a couple of years ago, there are still nuclear weapons in both countries to maintain their peace.
To sum up, nuclear power is needed in some countries but it is also interesting to note that nuclear weapons can be made by nuclear.


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[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Iraq doesn't have nuclear weapons.

Nuclear weapons can be made by nuclear?

Overall, the basic ideas in this essay are good, but the way they are expressed is very simple and the numerous grammatical errors can make meaning unclear. It's a similar story with vocabulary, though not quite to the same extent.

Make sure that points are absolutely clear. You could use more modals and adverbs to help you achieve this.

All the best,
David