Writing Task 1 7+

[Aky]

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My answer : Task 1

The chart represents data regarding the number of males and females in further education of Britain in three periods and the comparison of full-time and part-time in which men and women were studying.

It is clear from the chart, between 1970/1 and 1990/1 men saw a rise in part-time
Education at 100.000 and in full-time education males did not indicate higher number
in the vicinity of 15.000 people . Women were reckoned to be at approximately 70.000 part-time and full-time education was learned with a very low interest. In the 1980/81s both of genders were roughly similar trends with part-time education but more women studied full-time education than men. Afterwards, part-time and full-time were increased slightly by 90.000 men and about 30.000 men in full-time. However, women were in stark contrast to men reached higher than men in other periods in part-time with 110.000 women. In full-time, females were akin to men with 25.000 people.

Overall, from 1970/1 to 1990/1more men studied than women. Nevertheless, in the 1990/1 s more women opted to study both of part and full time education than men.
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Thank you very much !!!

What can you come up with suggestion ?

24.09.2016
17:58

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

The grammar and vocabulary make this a little difficult to understand. Reckoned? Akin? Opted?

Don't forget to post the chart next time (or a link to it).

However, I think that you have described the data to some extent, with attempts at comparisons.

Overall, not bad, but you certainly need to work on grammar and vocabulary.

All the best,
David