Please review my essay task 2

[ali15]

Modern communications mean that it’s no necessary to write letters. do you agree or disagree?

Throughout history modern communications has developed so rapidly. This can be seen on the ways people used to communicate in the past via letters to the ways people currently communicates through phone and email. It is agreed that with the most advanced communications there is no need to write a letters. This will be proven by looking at how modern communications are fast and convenient.

Firstly, advanced communications are extremely fast. For example, telephone allows people all over the world to interact with each other immediately. This example clearly shows that, this method of communication accelerates the communication process between people as it takes only a few seconds, however, letter is completely the opposite as it takes a very long time to reach from one side to another. Thus, for this reason person does not need to write a letter to communicate.

Secondly, modern communications are more convenient. For instance, there are a huge numbers of people in the world wide who can not write or read, thus, telephone communication is much suitable for them. This example illustrate that, interacting via telephone is much efficient as there is no need to write or to read, but communications through letter required an individual to write and to read, which it’s inconvenient for certain kind of people. Therefore, communication via letter is not necessary.

In conclusion, after analyzing how modern communications accelerate the communications process and how it makes interacting with others easy for ignorance people, it is highly agreed that using the most advanced communication there is no need to use a letter to communicate. It is predicted that people will continue to use modern communications as long as they are continuing to develop.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

The key thing missing from this essay is a discussion of letters as a form of communication. I agree that letters are less common than in the past, thanks to newer forms of technology, but that doesn't mean that letters will cease to exist.

1. Love letters
2. Legal and other official letters
3. Letters might still be used in places where technology is unavailable or not convenient to use

Vocabulary and grammar are quite good, but not of such a high standard as with your other essays, with numerous simple mistakes, e.g. This example illustrateS, is much MORE efficient, ignoranT people.

All the best,
David

[Flick]

Modern communications mean that it’s no necessary to write letters. do you agree or disagree?

Throughout history modern communications has developed so rapidly.(<--Reword to: "Recently, the speed at which modern communications is developing has increased.") This can be seen in the ways people used to communicate in the past via letters compared to the ways people currently communicate through phone and email. It is agreed that with today's advanced communications there is no need to write letters. This will be proven by looking at how modern communications are fast and convenient.

Firstly, advanced communications are extremely fast. For example, the telephone allows people all over the world to interact with each other immediately. This example clearly shows that this method of communication accelerates the communication process between people as it takes only a few seconds. However, a letter is completely the opposite as it takes a very long time to reach the recipient. Thus, for this reason a person does not need to write a letter to communicate.

Secondly, modern communications are more convenient. For instance, there are a huge number of people in the world who can not write or read. Thus, telephone communication is more suitable for them. This example illustrates that interacting via telephone is much more efficient as there is no need to write or to read, while communication through letters requires an individual to write and to read, which is inconvenient for certain people. Therefore, communication via letter is not necessary.

In conclusion, after analyzing how modern communications accelerate the communications process and how it makes interacting with others easy for illiterate people, it is agreed that using the most advanced communication there is means there is no need to write a letter to communicate. It is predicted that people will continue to use modern communications as long as they are continuing to develop.