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Shokir
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The provided graphs demonstrate data about aftermath of adult education exploration. The bar chart describes main reasons of adults’ decision to study. Meanwhile, the pie chart tells us how respondents think the costs of adult education should be shared.
What stands out from the graph are that two-fifth of adults decide to study only because of an interest to subject and almost as many decide to study for gaining qualifications. Factors like improvement of prospects and enjoy learning equally rate 20% of their choice. However, those, who consider studying helpful for their current job cover well under a quarter of the rate scale. The rest factors why adults decide to study are to be able to change jobs and to meet people constitute for 12% and about every ten of them respectively.
As about pie chart, it reveals that a quarter, 40% and 35% of each course should be distributed for taxpayers, individuals and employers respectively.

Dear examinar! I know that the use of the word 'cover' could be improper in this kind essays as you noted while checking my previous essays. But i don't know with what word i can replace it. Would be quite thankful if you suggested me some words.
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David.IELTS.Examiner
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Re: Thank you for sacrificing your valuable time for commenting on my T1

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Exploration?

Instead of 'cover', you can use 'be', 'make up', constitute' ... There really are numerous possibilities!

You have covered all the main points, but there's no real comparison and there is no overview of the data. Vocabulary and grammar are generally quite good.

All the best,
David
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