Task 2 (Academic)

[reajulislamremon]

please check my writing task 2 and give me possible band score.....

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing.

what do you thing are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

As of late people body weight are increased due to excessive eating. As a result, people is becoming weak before older. In many countries the weight of people is rising and their level of health and fitness are falling. Both side of the argument will be discussed before a reasoned conclusion is drawn.
Nowadays, people are become very busy with their jobs, studies and household chores. So, they do not get enough time to prepare their daily food. For example, people take more fast food than home made food. Because of this people become very debilitate and lazy. Moreover, people do not prepare food at home because it takes long time. Thus, they go to the nearest restaurant and eating unhealthy food that contain lots of calories and bad chemical ingredients which produce different types diseases in our body. To sum up materialistic life style is responsible for increasing over weight.
However, balance diet and exercise are required for overcome these problems. For instance, physical exercise like walking, running, cycling and so on are beneficial for reducing over weight. Similarly, fruits and vegetables are contained low calories that help to burn fats and cholesterol. Besides, the metabolism rate of human body decreases gradually due to increase ages. In that case taking more water is required for maintaining metabolism rate of body.
In summary, many reasons are responsible for obesity. But if we have a little conscious about our health we can easily solve many diseases that occurs our body due to over weight.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

Well, you say that restaurant food is unhealthy, but a) is that really true and b) then surely there is a great opportunity to set up a restaurant with healthy food, so why isn't that happening?

In the second main paragraph, you need to explain why this is not happening, which I think will lead to repetition of the first main paragraph.

In the conclusion, you state 'many reasons' are responsible and we can 'easily solve' these, but you haven't explained them.

Vocabulary is weak and although grammar is reasonable, there are numerous errors and the range is limited.

All the best,
David