Kindly evaluate Task 1 diagram

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Praoparn
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Kindly evaluate Task 1 diagram

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Essay topics: The diagram shows how sports shoes are made. Write a summary of the information. Select and report the main features. Write at least 150 words.
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The given figure illustrates the procedures used to make sports shoes. As a whole, there are three major steps, which are ordering, processing, and shipping,
Firstly, a customer orders a specifics type of shoes online. After that, the company would import raw materials such as: leather from Tannery-Leather, fabric from Mill-Fabric and rubber sole from the other factory. As soon as all materials arrive, different specialist workers will start cutting out a proper shape of the leather, sew the uppers, glue tops and bottoms parts together, and, finally, put in the rubber sole.
Those complete shoes are then packaged into hundreds of boxes before loading into the containers, which will be transported to the post-office before either arriving at the shop and be ready to sell out, or exporting through the ships. Generally, the whole procedures take approximately around eighteen months to be completed.
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Re: Kindly evaluate Task 1 diagram

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

Overall, a very good report. There are not many grammar mistakes and the range of vocabulary and grammar is acceptable. You have described the process well and there is a clear overview.

Well done!
David
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