ielts writing task2 practice.

[benny]

Question: The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people t travel from home for work, education or shopping.

To what extent do you agree or disagree.



My Response

Movement from one place to another is an integral part of human behaviour and existence, with industrial development in majority of countries the need to move has increased, leading to significant traffic problems in these cities. Therefore, it could be argued that cutting down the demands on individuals to travel for work, school or to the malls is the only solution to this problem. However, there are other proven leeways or avenues to solving this challenge, these will be discussed in this essay.

Firstly, the public transport systems of these cities should be restructured and where need be improved upon to reduced the number of vehicles on the roads.For instance, in Asia, particularly New Delhi in India a city with serious traffic bottleneck, the district councils in collaboration with some private businessmen decided to redesign the cities transport network by constructing more routes, buying modern coaches and buses with comfortable seats. They also embarked on training of drivers and constructions of ticketing outlets. With all these in place her citizens now prefer to travel with these buses rather than driving there cars, evidently the traffic challenge previously experienced has significantly reduced. Emulating this programm will solve these problem in other cities of the world.

Furthermore, exploring other means of transportation such as water and railway systems, might be very helpful in no small way. For example, most coastal cities in Europe, of note is Venice in Italy and Monaco in France have well structured ferries with drop off points connected to a speed train terminus thus, reducing the number people on the highway. This is why these cities never experience traffic problem.

in conclusion, after analyzing the above points, it has been proven that there are other options available for addressing this problem. if these are implemented along with educating individuals on the options of on-line shopping and on-line educational degrees by colleges who offer such courses, traffic congestion in our cities will definitely be a thing of the past.

[gjartist82]

Question: The only way to reduce the amount of traffic in cities today is by reducing the need for people t travel from home for work, education or shopping.

To what extent do you agree or disagree.



My Response

Movement from one place to another is an integral part of human behaviour and existence. With the advent of industrial development in the majority of countries, the need to move around has increased, leading to significant traffic problems in cities. Therefore, it could be argued that cutting down on the demands on individuals to travel for work, school or to the malls is the only solution to this problem. However, there are other proven leeways or avenues to meeting this challenge and these will be discussed in this essay.

Firstly, the public transport systems of most cities should be restructured and where needed, be improved upon to reduce the number of vehicles on the roads. For instance, in Asia - particularly New Delhi in India which is a city with a serious traffic bottleneck - the district councils in collaboration with some private businessmen decided to redesign the cities transport network by constructing more routes and buying modern coaches and buses with comfortable seats. They also embarked on the training of drivers and the construction of ticketing outlets. With all these in place, New Delhi's citizens now prefer to travel with these buses rather than by driving their cars. Evidently, the traffic challenge previously experienced has significantly reduced. Emulating this programme will solve these problem in other cities of the world.

Furthermore, exploring other means of transportation (< American English. British English = transport), such as water and railway systems, might be very helpful in no small way. For example, most coastal cities in Europe, of note is Venice in Italy and Monaco in France have well structured ferries with drop off points connected to a speed train terminus thus, reducing the number people on the highway. This is why these cities never (< Never?) experience traffic problems.

In conclusion, after analyzing the above points, it has been proven that there are other options available for addressing this problem. If these are implemented along with educating individuals on the options of online shopping and online educational degrees by colleges who offer such courses, traffic congestion in our cities will definitely be a thing of the past.

[benny]

please can you be more specific with the correction, and give me a band score. thanks