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allen_zhang
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GT-T2-130622-teacher

Post by allen_zhang »

130622 Why young people are not willing to become a teacher? What actions could be taken to attract them?

It is true that young people are increasingly unwilling to choose a career as a teacher in many societies. I believe that there are two main reasons contributing to this trend.

One of the main factors why people are less interested in seeking employment in education area is the low pay. Due to the global economic slowdown, many governments cut down their spending in public sectors. Unfortunately, education sector is one of them. Salary is arguably the most important consideration in people’s choosing of career. While there are many other better paid professions, such as doctor, engineer and lawyer, in private sectors, it is quite understandable for people to seek those more financially attractive alternatives.

Another possible reason for this trend is the low social status of teachers. Societies have become increasingly materialistic and some of our traditional values have been lost. The tradition of honoring and respecting teachers is fading away gradually as well. Parents and even students see teacher as an ordinary profession just like others and teachers are just doing their work as a way to earn their living. As a result, the sense of honor, another important incentive of being a teacher, does not exist anymore.

To tackle this problem, there are several measures should be taken by governments and societies. Firstly, governments should increase the investment in education area and teachers’ salary should be raised. Being provided with a decent income, more young graduates will be encouraged to find their employment in the education sector. Secondly, societies should pay more respect to teachers who are teaching, guiding and mentoring our future generation, because they are doing an honorable and very important job to the society. With an impoved social status, there could be more people willing to choose a career of teaching.

To conclude, the low pay and social status are the two reasons for the decreasing interests in being a teacher and governments and societies’ obligation to take actions to address this problem.
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Post by meglio »

Hi Allen.

Please try to follow a better template for your introduction. It's advised to start with a general introduction sentence, like this:

> Whether or not to become a teacher has always been a difficult decision for young people.

or

> All education systems today suffer from lack of teachers and tutors.
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Post by allen_zhang »

Hi Meglio,
Thank you.
I like your introduction. However, I was focusing on the main ideas, so I just tried to paraphrase the topic question. that's what I always do. I think the most important thing is the body paragraphs. Could yu please comment?

BR,
Allen
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Post by meglio »

I don't think there is more or less important part. Everything is important, and your introduction should dive user into your topic gradually, hence the so called "background statement" - very short and generic - should come first.
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allen_zhang wrote:130622 Why are young people not willing to become teachers? What actions could be taken to attract them?

It seems that young people are increasingly unwilling to choose a career as a teacher in many societies. (<-- how do you know it is true? Can you be more specific with statistics or countries?) I believe that there are two main reasons contributing to this trend.

One of the main factors why people are less interested in seeking employment in education is the low pay. Due to the global economic slowdown, many governments have cut down their spending in public sectors. Unfortunately, the education sector is one of these. Salary is arguably the most important consideration when choosing a career. While there are many other better paid professions, such as doctor, engineer, and lawyer in the private sector, it is quite understandable for people to seek those more financially attractive alternatives.

Another possible reason for this trend is the low social status of teachers. Societies have become increasingly materialistic and some of our traditional values have been lost. (<-- this is a good point well expressed.) The tradition of honoring and respecting teachers is fading away. Parents and even students see teaching as an ordinary profession just like others. They feel teachers are just doing their work as a way to earn their living (<-- as opposed to what? Shaping the next generation? Inspiring future doctors, lawyers, etc?. As a result, the sense of honor, another important incentive for being a teacher, does not exist anymore.

To tackle this problem, there are several measures that should be taken by governments and societies. Firstly, governments should increase the investment in education and teachers’ salaries should be raised. Being provided with a decent income, more young graduates will be encouraged to seek employment in the education sector. Secondly, societies should pay more respect to teachers who are teaching, guiding and mentoring our future generations, because they are doing an honorable and very important job. With an impoved social status, there should be more people willing to choose a career in teaching.

To conclude, the low pay and social status are two reasons for the decreasing interest in being a teacher, and governments and societies’ have to take action to address this problem.
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