This a piece of writing for line graph, please correct my grammar / spelling / coherence is it's needed . Cheers !
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The diagram depicts the numeric values for CFC emissions in four nations from 2005 to 2009 .
It is cleared that the total amount of CFC emissions slightly decrease over a period of 5 years . In particular, the level in India rose while the level of Germany, Russia and Japan fell .
Beginning with the top leading group , Japan and Russia constantly the most CFCs release countries with a similar pattern of decreasing direction . Throughout the period of four years , while the numbers in Japan had flatten out for a while then commenced to marginally decrease to just under 1400MT before stabilizing, Russia's numbers rose rapidly from whether 1600MT in 2005 finished at 1700MT in 2008. This gap of approximately 300MT remained to contrast as both levels speedily dived for one year until both nations ascend by 1500MT for Russia and 1200MT for Japan in 2009.
The lower level of CFC emissions group illustrated two contrasting trends performed by Germany and India .In 2005, the two nations began the stage at sharply 900MT and just under 1200MT particularly. Both values persisted to be stable for one year before they start to move in two dissimilarity ways . From 2006 to 2009, the CFC level in Germany underwent a faintly fluctuate then slightly plunged from 900MT to 800MT . At this point, by rocketing swiftly, India overtook Japan at 1400MT and continue to increase wildly ending at 1500MT - where it meets the level of Russia .
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kloe wrote:This a piece of writing for line graph, please correct my grammar / spelling / coherence is it's needed . Cheers !
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The diagram depicts the numeric values for CFC emissions in four nations from 2005 to 2009 .
It is clear that the total amount of CFC emissions slightly decreased over the 5 years recorded. While the level in India rose, the levels in Germany, Russia and Japan fell.
Beginning with the countries with the highest output, Japan and Russia consistently had the highest level of CFC release which dropped in the last year for both countries. From 2005 to 2008, the numbers for Japan were steady then marginally decreased to just under 1400MT. Russia's numbers rose rapidly from 1600MT in 2005 to 1700MT in 2008. This increase of approximately 100MT is a sharp contrast to what happened in 2009, when levels speedily dived for both nations to 1500MT for Russia and 1200MT for Japan.
Theremaining countries, Germany and India tell a different story.In 2005, the two nations were emitting around 900MT and just under 1200MT respectively. Both countries were stable from 2005 to 2006, when their levels began to change. From 2006 to 2009, the CFC level in Germany fluctuated slightly then dropped from 900MT to 800MT . Conversely, India overtook Japan at 1400MT and continue to increase rapidly, ending 2009 at 1500MT, the same level asRussia.