IELTS ACADEMIC TASK 2- ROAD ACCIDENTS

[candy07]

QUESTION- A large number of deaths are caused by road accidents . Why do so many accidents occur ? Make recommendations that would help to reduce the number of road accidents . Write minimum 250 words.

Response -

Road side accidents are among the major causes of mortality all over the world. This is an alarming issue as many people lose their lives at a very young age due to motor vehicle accidents. It is believed that inexperienced drivers and intoxication while driving are two major causes of road accidents. Solutions such as careful licensing of drivers and strict measures to reduce drunk driving will be analysed for viability.

First of all it is considered that the major cause of road accidents is young and untrained drivers driving the vehicle . Many adolescents start driving without proper training and at a young age. For example, in countries such as India there are no defined driving tests for acquiring driving license . Further , there is no lower age limit defined for driving . However , in countries like Australia , there are very strict driving tests required for licensing and children can not drive before the age of eighteen . Statistically, it is confirmed that the number of road accidents occurring in Australia is 40 % less than in India. Thus proper licensing of individuals appears as a promising solution to this problem.

Secondly, it is believed that the main cause of traffic accidents is drunk driving. Many people drive vehicles under the influence of alcohol , leading to loss over their motor control and road accidents . For instance , a research was carried out at a hospital in New York , U.S.A. and it was observed that more than 60% cases of automobile accidents were reported on Friday and Saturday evenings. Moreover, alcohol was detected in blood samples of almost 80% of drivers. Therefore it is recommended that heavy penalties should be applied to drivers who are drunk . Governments should also implement strict rules such as breath alcohol concentration tests to prevent motor vehicle accidents.

To conclude , it can be said that road accidents are a preventable cause of death and if governments implement strict rules, this catastrophe can be avoided. It is hoped that governments as well as society will behave more responsibly so that millions of young lives may be saved.

[Johnson zhang]

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[Flick]

QUESTION- A large number of deaths are caused by road accidents . Why do so many accidents occur ? Make recommendations that would help to reduce the number of road accidents . Write minimum 250 words.

Response -

Road (<-- Johnson zhang was correct - roadside accidents are accidents that happen on the side of the road, not ON the road.) accidents are among the major causes of mortality all over the world. This is an alarming issue as many people lose their lives at a very young age due to motor vehicle accidents. It is believed that inexperienced drivers and intoxication while driving are two major causes of road accidents. Solutions such as careful licensing of drivers and strict measures to reduce drunk driving will be analysed for viability.

First of all, it is considered that the major cause of road accidents is young and untrained drivers driving the vehicle. Many adolescents start driving without proper training and at a young age. For example, in countries such as India there are no defined driving tests for acquiring a driving license. Further, there is no minimum age limit defined for driving. However, in countries like Australia, there are very strict driving tests required for licensing and children can not drive before the age of eighteen. Statistically, it is confirmed that the number of road accidents occurring in Australia is 40 % less than in India. Thus proper licensing of individuals appears to be a promising solution to this problem.

Secondly, it is believed that the main cause of traffic accidents is drunk driving. Many people drive vehicles under the influence of alcohol, leading to loss of control and road accidents. For instance, a study was carried out at a hospital in New York, U.S.A. and it was observed that more than 60% of cases of automobile accidents were reported on Friday and Saturday evenings. Moreover, alcohol was detected in blood samples of almost 80% of drivers. Therefore, it is recommended that heavy penalties should be applied to drivers who are drunk. Governments should also implement strict rules such as breath alcohol concentration tests to prevent motor vehicle accidents.

To conclude, it can be said that road accidents are a preventable cause of death and if governments implement strict rules, this catastrophe can be avoided. It is hoped that governments as well as society will behave more responsibly so that millions of young lives may be saved.

Good job. Your arguments are clear and easy to understand.
Don't forget, there is no space before a comma or period.
Thanks,
Flick

[candy07]

Hi Flick

Thanks a lot for the corrections.

Regards

[candy07]

Can you please check my task submitted on 31st May

Thanks
Candy

[allen_zhang]

Indeed a very good essay.
You demonstrate a approach for "problem+solution" essays : put one problem and its solution in one paragraph. I never try this before. I will need to investigate your essay carefully.

@Flick,
Could you please kindly check one or two of my recent essays? Below is one of them.
viewtopic.php?f=5&t=1883

[Flick]

Hi Candy and Allen,

I'm about a week behind with checking essays, but I will do my best to get to your submissions as soon as possible.

Thanks,
Flick.