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Some people think that hard working and determination are the key factors for being successful in the life, other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both sides, what is your opinion?

Key success gradients of any achievement have always been well disputed. The discussion gets much interested when hard working and determination are compared as key success elements with natural talent, skills and luck. It is argued that hard working and determination are key factors for being successful in the life. Analyzing effects of both sides on one's achievements will prove this stance.
Natural talent, skills and luck brings temporary success which cannot give birth to a successful life. A GOD gifted talent can make one successful only in one or two episodes of like, but not in all parts of life. Similarly, skills and luck make one successful temporarily. A person who is extremely good in mathematics or a person who has developed excellent skills in mathematics by one time hard work can succeed in mathematics only. Such type of success cannot be taken as a successful life. Thus it can be seen that the other factors never bring a successful life.

Hard working and determination can make one successful in any area of life and hence possessor of these qualities enjoys a successful life throughout. A person with even very poor attitude of mathematics can develop his attitude if he works extremely hard on mathematics problems with full dedication. A report published by The New York Time show that people start developing mental attitude when they practice very hard with full determination. A friend of me who never studied primary school mathematics becomes excellent in advanced mathematics through multiple attempts of those mathematics problems which he could never understand easily. Hence, the pleasant effects of hardworking and determination can be seen.
To compendium, I would say that hard working and determination are key success gradients of a successful life. It is highly recommended that one should rely on these qualities to be successful in all areas of life.

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Some people think that hard working and determination are the key factors for being successful in the life, other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both sides, what is your opinion?

Key success gradients of any achievement have always been well disputed. The discussion gets much interested when hard working and determination are compared as key success elements with natural talent, skills and luck. It is argued that hard working and determination are key factors for being successful in the life. Analyzing effects of both sides on one's achievements will prove this stance.
Natural talent, skills and luck brings temporary success which cannot give birth to a successful life. A GOD gifted talent can make one successful only in one or two episodes of like, but not in all parts of life. Similarly, skills and luck make one successful temporarily. A person who is extremely good in mathematics or a person who has developed excellent skills in mathematics by one time hard work can succeed in mathematics only. Such type of success cannot be taken as a successful life. Thus it can be seen that the other factors never bring a successful life.

Hard working and determination can make one successful in any area of life and hence possessor of these qualities enjoys a successful life throughout. A person with even very poor attitude of mathematics can develop his attitude if he works extremely hard on mathematics problems with full dedication. A report published by The New York Time show that people start developing mental attitude when they practice very hard with full determination. A friend of me who never studied primary school mathematics becomes excellent in advanced mathematics through multiple attempts of those mathematics problems which he could never understand easily. Hence, the pleasant effects of hardworking and determination can be seen.
To compendium, I would say that hard working and determination are key success gradients of a successful life. It is highly recommended that one should rely on these qualities to be successful in all areas of life.