task 2< nursery school>

[durai]

Should children go to nursery schools prior to their primary schools? Do you agree or disagree?

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Over the last decade, the number of children who go to primary schools has significantly increased the world over. While some opine that juveniles, before staring their primary education, should attend preschool, others have different opinion. To my mind, they should be sent to nursery schools before primary since this approach has more advantages than all other options.

To begin with, having prior experience in a school environment would help children to adapt them easily at primary level. For example, my nephew, who is 6 years old, was very interested to go to his learning centre when he was studying year one. This was because he had some positive experience in Kanamal preschool education centre located close to his home. Form this example, it is clear that the reason that sending children to preschool is justified.

Furthermore, this way of accommodating children early at a school acts as a precursor for developing their social skills at an early age. For instance, in Australia, almost all families send their offspring to nursery schools, and as a result, children develop some sort of communication among them. Several studies in India unequivocally proved that this is one of the reasons why socialising is a very common habit among Australians. Now it is understandable why young ones should proceed to nursery schools first.

For this essay, it can be conclude that there are many substantial benefits if adolescents have been sent to Kindergarten. Therefore, in my opinion, families all over the world should send their little ones to nursery before primary schools. It is hoped that children would find many advantages in addition to the above two merits.

[allen_zhang]

Over the last decade, the number of children who go to primary schools has significantly increased the world over.(seems not relevant to the topic ) While some opine that juveniles (From my understanding, juveniles mean teenagers, preschool boys ad girls are not juveniles.), before staring their primary education, should attend preschool, others have different opinions. To my mind, they should be sent to nursery schools before primary since this approach has more advantages than all other options.



To begin with, having prior experience in a school environment would help children to adapt themselves easily at primary level. For example, my nephew, who is 6 years old, was very interested to go to his learning centre when he was studying year one. This was because he had some positive experience in Kanamal preschool education centre located close to his home. Form this example, it is clear that the reason that sending children to preschool is justified.("justified" sounds a little too much here. this is not a issue about justice.)

Furthermore, this way of accommodating children early at a school acts as a precursor for developing their social skills at an early age. For instance, in Australia, almost all families send their offspring to nursery schools, and as a result, children develop some sort of communication among them (not clear to me, what is "develop some sort of communication?"). Several studies in India unequivocally proved that this is one of the reasons why socialising is a very common habit among Australians. Now it is understandable why young ones should proceed to nursery schools first.

For this essay, it can be concluded that there are many substantial benefits if adolescents(I am sure that adolescents are not at the kindergarten age )have been sent to a Kindergarten. Therefore, in my opinion, families all over the world should send their little ones to nursery before primary schools. It is hoped that children would find many advantages in addition to the above two merits.(to me, the last sentence rather cause confusion. I would remove it.)

[durai]

Hi Allen,

first sentence not necessarily relevant to the topic, its just a general background statement, so you can talk something related to subject, here the subject is " nursery school or primary school" question says " should we send children to nursery'.

so, I said " children going to primary schools increased , so at this situation many say that " we should send them to preschool"


when I checked " juveniles" any person under 18 is called as juveniles,same as adolesecnts still not sure after your comments, Can you suggest any other words for "kids"


"justified ' not necessary relates to justice. "it means the reason is fair, or acceptable, or uphold the point,


I should put ORAL communication among children.

In addition to the above two merits,it is hoped that children would find many advantages while studying at preshool.

[durai]

Hi Allen,

For this essay, Ielts-blog gave me band 8.5,

TR and CC 8.5
LR and GR 8
overall 8.5

Its crazy , how can I get band 8.5, when I am struggling to get band 7.
Now I feel that this correction is waste of money..

Durai

[allen_zhang]

Hi Durai,
I totally agree with you.
They even gave me a 9 on that globalization essay!
Anyway, it's quite cheap and makes us happy. LOL

It's crazy , how can I get band 8.5, when I am struggling to get band 7.
Now I feel that this correction is a waste of money..

, Let's try to avoid any mistake in our writing, especially those we are aware of!!