culture same< positive or negative>

[durai]

Culture nowadays is similar all over the world than it used to be in the past.
What are the reasons for this?
Is this positive or negative?

In the early days, people usually differentiated in the name of cultures. Over the last decade, the culture in different parts of the world looks similar which gives rise to a phenomenon called global culture. This is because people are getting good exposure towards others in every sphere of the world. This trend has both positive and negative effects.

On the one hand, the main benefit of a single world culture is the eradication of racism in the society. This means that if there is a similar way of lifestyle, then there will be a less chance of discrimination. For example, if a British tourist comes to India, he/she cannot be discriminated for their behaviours because people in India are already exposed to such behaviours and treat him/her as a normal person. From this it is clear that a single culture reduces discrimination, and thus beneficial to the community.

On the other hand, the substantial drawback of such a trend is the loss of cultural identity. This is because people in different countries are known for their language, food, manners and behaviours. For instance, Aborigines in Australia are identified with their different dialects and food habits, and because of a single culture, there is a loss of such dialects and habits. Now it is understandable that having a global culture acts as a catalyst for destroying the different cultures on this earth.

From this essay, it can be concluded that the exposure of people acts as a precursor for producing a similar culture the world over. Such a single culture avoids discrimination among humans, but destroys many customs and traditions. In my opinion, this trend has more benefits because living without discrimination is the need of the day.

[allen_zhang]

HI Durai,
I guess you didn't read the topic question carefully.

Culture nowadays is similar all over the world than it used to be in the past.
What are the reasons for this?
Is this positive or negative?

you missed one bulletin point.

Best regards,
Allen

[durai]

Hi Allen,

I know, but is it necessary to explain in detail about that bullet point,

I have seen Ryan's essay , that for such type, he said a reason in his introduction and outlined in his conclusion and gave detail explanation of other question.

the same I did here,

even i am too sure to do like this, at exam conditions I write one para for reasons and agree that it s a positive and develop that idea in one paragraph.

so ideally,


intro- saying one reason and conclude that a positive development.
2nd para- reasons with examples
3rd - why positive, explanation, example
4th- conclude


How would you write this one ?


Durai

[allen_zhang]

From my point of view, it would be better to write one paragraph for reasons as you mentioned.
We cannot risk losing point on task response.

One more thing:
As this is the last week before our test, I decided to stop writing new essays. I am planning to go over all my written essays and try to figure out my frequent mistakes.

[durai]

Yes,

you are right,

This was the essay I wrote a month ago, I am doing mock test myself,

doing listening, reading, and writing with keeping exact time...


anyway...good luck..