The bar chart illustrates the contribution level of three industrial sectors – agriculture, manufacturing, and business and finance – to the UK economy during the twentieth century. Data is showed across 4 time points: 1900, 1950, 1975 and 2000. Overall, two main phenomenons can be seen. The first one is an upward trend for the more modern industry: business and finance. The second one is a downward trend for the traditional industries: agriculture and manufacturing.
On 1900, agriculture and manufacturing counted around 50% each, occupied almost entirely UK's economy. On that time, business and finance almost didn't impact. On 1950, a first sign for change was seen. Manufacturing contribution dropped by third whereas business and finance gained 10% more. At that time, agriculture's contribution almost didn't change. On 1975 the economy structure was totally different. Business and finance, a sector that almost didn't exist 50 years before, bypassed the past leader – agriculture which dropped substantially to 10%. On 2000, business and finance became the most dominant factor across these three sectors.
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greg wrote:The bar chart illustrates the contribution level of three industrial sectors – agriculture, manufacturing, and business and finance – to the UK economy during the twentieth century. Data is shown across 4 time points: 1900, 1950, 1975 and 2000. Overall, two main phenomenons can be seen. The first one is an upward trend for the more modern industry: business and finance. The second one is a downward trend for the traditional industries: agriculture and manufacturing.
In 1900, agriculture and manufacturing accounted for almost all of the UK's economy with almost 100% of the total contribution. During that time, business and finance had practically no impact. In 1950, the first signs of change were seen. Manufacturing contribution dropped by a third whereas business and finance gained 10%. At that time, agriculture's contribution almost didn't change. In 1975 the economy structure was totally different. Business and finance, a sector that almost didn't exist 50 years before, bypassed the previously dominant sector, agriculture, which dropped substantially to 10%. In 2000, business and finance became the most dominant sectors across these three industries.