Globalisation ( please review my work)

[Aditi]

No one ca deny the fact that globalisation has affected the world’s economy in a very positive way. However, it is often argued that it has causes loss of cultural diversity and spread of deadly diseases around the globe. This essay will illustrate both the advantages and disadvantages of globalisation with the examples.

On the one hand, globalisation creates various job opportunities for the local people. That is to say, due to establishment of multinational companies, like Coke Company, D&G Company, and Macdonald throughout the world, local citizens are benefitted. For example, Coke Company in china has employed more than 5000 workers, and has increased government revenue. In addition, people share cultures, traditions, cuisines and festivals among each other. For instance, an Indian person enjoys traditional Indian cuisines from the local restaurants in Sydney.

On the other hand, diseases rapidly spread due to globalisation in transportation sector. Nowadays people can easily travel throughout the world, and so do the viruses. This creates huge problems for many nations. Take bird flu as an example, this disease was originated from Italy but now most of the nations are victim of this flu. Furthermore, globalisation has creates loss in cultural diversity. To illustrate, many younger generation are adapting the western cultures and losing their own cultural identity. This has resulted in disappearance of many cultures and created an issue among historical scientist.

To conclude, as everything has both positive and negative side globalisation is not an exception. Although it has created employment opportunities, the expansion of virus is definitely harmful for the general people. So, it is recommended that governments should enforce certain law that eradicate these problems and make the world the best place to live.

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