please comment my essay DEATH PENALTY

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Piazzi
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please comment my essay DEATH PENALTY

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You should write at least 250 words.

Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of
violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

You should write at least 250 words.

You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with
examples and relevant evidence.



Fear is one of the strongest feelings present in our contemporary society. One good example of where and how it is rooted among us is in the way of how our worst criminals are punished: the death penalty. It is agreed that capital punishment make our lives more secure. The control that the feeling of fear has in our society as well the data about the violence give us a basis to confirm the previous thesis.

Even for a criminal, life is something valuable that should be preserved and, for this reason, with death penalty, an individual would think twice before commit a violent crime. In this case, the fear of the death control people acts, preventing ourselves from harmful crimes as murder. Consequently, the capital punishment has an essential paper in keep the fear alive in criminal minds.

This control by fear imposed by the death penalty has been shown very effective. New data display which, while in the countries where such penalty is implemented, the crime rates are stable, where it do not exist, the same rates are growing. Ono more time is proved how effective is the fear of being sentenced with a capital punishment, and how it increase the levels of security.

Finally, if the death penalty seems an antique, old-fashioned method of punishment, the numbers and the human mentality have been shown that this method remains essential to control violence in society as well prevent violent crimes be committed. Without capital punishment, you could be the next fatal victim on the surveys data.
robin20y
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Re: please comment my essay DEATH PENALTY

Post by robin20y »

HI PIAZZI

Without capital punishment (the death penalty) our lives are less secure and crimes of
violence increase. Capital punishment in essential to control violence in society.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Fear is one of the strongest feelings present in our contemporary society. One good example of where and how it is rooted among us is in the way of how our worst criminals are punished: the death penalty. It is agreed that capital punishment make our lives more secure. The control that the feeling of fear has in our society as well the data about the violence give us a basis to confirm the previous thesis.

Even for a criminal, life is something valuable that should be preserved and, for this reason, with death penalty, an individual would think twice before commit a violent crime. In this case, the fear of the death control people acts, preventing ourselves from harmful crimes as murder. Consequently, the capital punishment has an essential paper in keep the fear alive in criminal minds.

This control by fear imposed by the death penalty has been shown very effective. New data display which, while in the countries where such penalty is implemented, the crime rates are stable, where it do not exist, the same rates are growing. (what data, who gave that data. Use real life examples here.) Ono more time is proved how effective is the fear of being sentenced with a capital punishment,( You didn't prove anything here) and how it increase the levels of security.

Finally, if the death penalty seems an antique ( "Wrong word" use ancient or anything like that), old-fashioned(How can you say a punishment as a fashion) method of punishment, the numbers(I didn't see any figures in this writing) and the human mentality have been shown that this method remains essential to control violence in society as well prevent violent crimes be committed. Without capital punishment, you could be the next fatal victim on the surveys data. (??? unclear sentence)
You have been asked about capital punishment not fear in mind. So, start with the general idea about the subject being asked.
Instead of saying a general example, you can go for a real life examples such as the practices in middle east countries.
spelling mistakes are found. Grammatical errors are many. Similarly , some of the words you were used are not suitable to the situations.
From your writing, it is understandable that you have a great ability to write good essays. For that, you need more practice.
Try to minimize the errors and of course don't forget to write a conclusion. You may severely get punished for that.
Thank you
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