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:The given chart compares that the attendance of Canadians of different ages at live arts performance.
there is clearly a strong relationship between age and the sort of events people attend.

The figures show that almost half of teenagers in Canada frequently go to live arts events and that they are nearly twice as likely to attend such performances as Canadians who are 60 or over.
Not surprisingly, the greatest difference in attendance is for pop concerts.
the 15 to 19 age group is almost five times as likely as the over 60s to attend to such concerts.

Likewise, the proportion of Canadians who go to Theatre, Opera and Dance performance falls as age increases.
The contrast, the percentage who go to classical and choral music performances rises as age increases.
Approximately 1 in 10 Canadians who are 60 or over go to classical concerts.
This percentage is higher than that for teenagers.
Attendance rates vary the least for Theatre and Opera performances.
Only about a fifth of all age group attend the theatre frequently.
Similarly, a very small percentage of any age group go to the Opera regularly.

In summary, audiences at Canadian performing arts events seems to be mainly young people attending plays or pop concerts.

Hello!

Well you noted the key trend, which is good.

Then everything collapsed! (Sorry!)

This is a REALLY easy T1 - just divide the events in to two groups according to whether older or younger people are more likely to attend. This will determine your paragraphing. You can split the ones which young people are more likely to attend into 2 groups if you like, as there are far more.

Grammar is very good, as is vocabulary, but try to include some exact figures.

All the best,
David