Please evaluate my essay - Task 2
Posted: Sat Apr 05, 2014 5:49 am
All over the world, the number of overweight people is growing. What do you feel are the main causes of this? What are the effects?
Obesity among people worldwide has surfaced as a serious threat to human health. It has increased at an alarming rate globally, especially during the past 40 years of human existence. The reasons and ill-effects of being overweight will be further analyzed.
One of the major causes of obesity is the sedentary lifestyle of people. For example, individuals working in the services sector are not required to exert themselves physically thereby leading to a predominantly inactive lifestyle, thus leading to corpulence. Another reason that maybe attributed to putting on excessive body weight is the bad habit of people eating more and more pre-cooked, fast and frozen foods. This is especially true of metropolises where people are so busy in their professional work that they do not find time to prepare healthy home-cooked meals. Sadly, more and more people are joining the bandwagon of frozen and fast food consumers, thus leading to obesity.
Let us discuss the effects of acquiring unneeded body fat. Firstly, it leads to some dreadful diseases like high blood pressure, high cholesterol and diabetes to name a few. These diseases have been found to have a direct relation to increased body weight. They further put an excessive burden on the healthcare system and also decrease the overall quality of human life. Secondly, being overweight leads to a lack of physical fitness and stamina which reduces an individual’s concentration and productivity in personal and professional life. If majority of the population suffers from a lack of fitness then one can clearly see how it would negatively affect the productivity and growth of the nation as a whole.
To summarize, the problems of stoutness cannot be brushed aside lightly. As we can see, the long term effects of being overweight are detrimental for the wellbeing of an individual and the society at large.
Obesity among people worldwide has surfaced as a serious threat to human health. It has increased at an alarming rate globally, especially during the past 40 years of human existence. The reasons and ill-effects of being overweight will be further analyzed.
One of the major causes of obesity is the sedentary lifestyle of people. For example, individuals working in the services sector are not required to exert themselves physically thereby leading to a predominantly inactive lifestyle, thus leading to corpulence. Another reason that maybe attributed to putting on excessive body weight is the bad habit of people eating more and more pre-cooked, fast and frozen foods. This is especially true of metropolises where people are so busy in their professional work that they do not find time to prepare healthy home-cooked meals. Sadly, more and more people are joining the bandwagon of frozen and fast food consumers, thus leading to obesity.
Let us discuss the effects of acquiring unneeded body fat. Firstly, it leads to some dreadful diseases like high blood pressure, high cholesterol and diabetes to name a few. These diseases have been found to have a direct relation to increased body weight. They further put an excessive burden on the healthcare system and also decrease the overall quality of human life. Secondly, being overweight leads to a lack of physical fitness and stamina which reduces an individual’s concentration and productivity in personal and professional life. If majority of the population suffers from a lack of fitness then one can clearly see how it would negatively affect the productivity and growth of the nation as a whole.
To summarize, the problems of stoutness cannot be brushed aside lightly. As we can see, the long term effects of being overweight are detrimental for the wellbeing of an individual and the society at large.
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