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Without any doubt, one of the main problems facing our planet today has to do with the extinction of many vegetal and animal species. This highly concerning issue extends throughout the whole planet, without distinction of country, region or continent.

Considering the complex nature of ecosystems, and the perfect balance with which ecosystems function, the massive extinction of vegetal and animal species leads to many disastrous consequences, including the overgrowth of both animal and plant invasive species, poverty and food starvation, climate change, the emergence of new diseases, amongst others.

It is well known the relationship between a healthy and balanced ecosystem and noxious fauna. The extinction of natural predators brings about the massive reproduction of noxious species at the expense of the rest of the ecosystem. When noxious species become the dominant population within the ecosystem, useful plants, including those that are grown for human consumption, become affected, reducing their population with the obvious negative implications for human agriculture and economy, jeopardizing food security, affecting in particular less developed countries, with poor technical skills to cope with the emergent challenges.

On the other hand, it is important to consider the role of plants as natural climate regulators and buffers, since their extinction gives rise to an increase in local and global temperature, playing a key role in climate change. Besides climate change contributes to the development of new conditions, capable of being the basis of climate-related diseases, including Dengue virus infections, Zika virus infections and a great variety of tropical diseases, that in the past used to affect specific regions.

One way to cope with this issue is to increase legal actions against the trade of endangered species and their products by the establishment of an international endangered species surveillance agency, with the cooperation of local authorities, so that both companies and individuals, involved in endangered species trafficking, stop their illegal activities and face the legal consequences of their actions.

Besides, open fishing and hunting ought to be limited, by the setting of strict laws at an international level, focused on seasons during which it is possible to safely perform these activities, ways of working with the minimum disruption to the environment and sustainable fishing and hunting techniques.

Finally, there should be programs fostering sustainable fish breeding, and the establishment of renewable forests, so that most of the resources that once came from open forests and oceans are replaced by resources coming from sustainable farms and artificially grown renewable forests, warrantying the minimum impact to the local and global ecosystem.

In conclusion, there is no simple solution to this overwhelmingly complex issue, nevertheless the implementation of strict legal regulations and the fostering of fish sustainable breeding will contribute to decrease the amount of endangered species within a relatively short time period.

Hello!

Oh, one of my favourite topics for discussion!

I'm going to treat the first two paragraphs as an introduction. They should be together.

1. Is the relationship 'well known'? What 'noxious' species are you thinking of? (Humans is the obvious answer!)
2. The 'jump' from invasive species to technical skills needs to be clarified.
3. The extinction of which plants? One of my favourite 'fun facts' is that plants 'eat' CO2. Climate change means there is more CO2 in the atmosphere. What's the problem?
4. Are those diseases always climate related or is the fact that people can travel internationally quickly and easily a factor?
5. Legal action has been shown to fail. The Chinese are still buying up bits of endangered animals like crazy.
6. An agency? Like the World Wildlife Fund, for example?
7. Safely perform?
8. Artificially grown forests?! What happened to those bad invasive species?

Again, grammar and vocabulary are quite good, but your ideas are demonstrably wrong and/or unexplained and/or already in use and not succeeding. Avoid making assertions and use modal verbs to indicate that something is not always the case.

All the best,
David

Thanks for your soon and accurate response

I will take into account the points you have made, and I will post a corrected essay.

Thanks again for your support.

Here is the second version of my essay, I hope I have corrected most of my previous mistakes.

in the case of point #3, the extinction of plants is relevant since plants not only get rid of CO2, but they are also climate buffers, which means that they reduce global temperature just as alkaline molecules increase ph, working as acid "buffers".

Without any doubt, one of the main problems facing our planet today has to do with the extinction of many vegetal and animal species. This highly concerning issue extends throughout the whole planet, without distinction of country, region or continent. Considering the complex nature of ecosystems, and the perfect balance with which ecosystems function, the massive extinction of vegetal and animal species leads to many disastrous consequences, including the overgrowth of both animal and plant invasive species, poverty and food starvation, climate change, the emergence of new diseases, amongst others.

There is a relationship between a healthy and balanced ecosystem and noxious fauna (rats, grasshoppers, mosquitoes, fleas, etc.). The extinction of natural predators brings about the massive reproduction of noxious species at the expense of the rest of the ecosystem. When noxious species become the dominant population within the ecosystem, useful plants, including those that are grown for human consumption, become affected, reducing their population with the obvious negative implications for human agriculture and economy, jeopardizing food security, affecting in particular less developed countries, where there is a lack of techniques to effectively extinguish invasive species that damage their valuable crops.

On the other hand, it is important to consider the role of plants as natural climate regulators and buffers, since their extinction gives rise to an increase in local and global temperature, playing a key role in climate change. Besides climate change contributes to the development of new conditions, capable of being the basis of climate-related diseases, including Dengue virus infections, Zika virus infections and a great variety of tropical diseases, that are partially the result of rising temperatures where the weather used to be cooler.

One way to cope with this issue would be to increase legal actions against the trade of endangered species and their products by the establishment of an international endangered species surveillance agency, that would work hand by hand with local authorities, making sure that locally established laws regarding endangered species trafficking are followed at all times. Unlike established agencies (e.g... World Wildlife Fund), the new international agency should have the possibility of monitoring the actions of local authorities, with the capability of notifying when laws are not followed, in this way countries that usually break legal regulations would have to comply with them, otherwise they would face legal consequences.

Another option would be to implement an international program, focused on captivity breeding of endangered animal species, which would avoid the extinction of some species that are on the verge of completely being gone, like the sea “Vaquitas,” which have an estimated world population of fewer than 100 individuals. Programs like this could allow the recuperation of a significant portion of the population, being then able to reintroduce the endangered species back to nature.

In conclusion, there is no simple solution to this overwhelmingly complex issue, nevertheless the implementation of a international surveilance agency and the fostering of captivity breeding programs would allow to cope with this issue within a relatively short time period.