Marry for love or money. Please help assess! TQ!

[plin0627]

Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss and give your own opinion.

In today’s uncertain and materialised world, people often argue as to neither marry for love nor money. This is a question that has no definite answer as it is an individual preference and requirement for marriage.

On one hand, those who posit that we ought not to marry for money but love might have considered that marriage is a lifelong journey and has a significant impact on our life. The partners are living with his or her spouse under one roof for decades and that spending time together requires tolerance and patience to adjust and accept both personalities and behaviours with respect and love. For instance, husbands and wive will always forgive their partners after an argument. This is how love helps form and strengthen a family bond and relationship.

One the other hand, some assert that wed for money is more intelligent than for love. Marrying someone who is rich or has greater income are those who seek for better and stable life. Providing that they do not have to worry and stress to earn and work for livings, such could also help reduce their burden in maintaining and improving the four fundamental human needs, namely, clothing, foods, shelter and transportation. Perhaps, this is the important reason that causes certain people to marry for the sake of money.

In summary, I think there is no right or wrong in between marrying for love and money. This is because everyone’s desire and preference are different. In fact, such decision does not violate any law of marriage of today’s world.

[David.IELTS.Examiner]

Hello!

This would not be an IELTS question, but I like it anyway!

In the introduction, the word 'neither' is incorrect!

In the first main paragraph, spouses certainly do not always forgive each other after an argument! Moreover, I don't think that you have really provided an argument there.

In the second main paragraph, you have failed to note any problems with a marriage based solely on money.

Overall, an interesting topic, but a weak essay. Arguments are not very clear. Development is very limited. Vocabulary and grammar are pretty basic.

All the best,
David

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Some say you should always marry for love; others say that in an uncertain world it’s wiser to marry for money. Discuss and give your own opinion.

In today’s uncertain and materialistic world, people often argue whether it is better to marry for love or money. This is a question that has no definite answer as it depends on individual preference and requirement for marriage.

On one hand, those who posit that we ought to marry for love, not money, might have considered that marriage is a lifelong journey and has a significant impact on our lives. The partners are living with his or her spouse under one roof for decades and spending time together requires tolerance and patience to adjust and accept both personalities and behaviours with respect and love. For instance, husbands and wives will always forgive their partner after an argument. This is how love helps form and strengthen a family bond and relationship.

One the other hand, some assert that marrying for money is more intelligent than marrying for love. Marrying someone who is rich or has greater income may lead to a better and stable life. Providing that they do not have to worry and stress to earn a living, such could also help reduce their burden in maintaining and improving the four fundamental human needs, namely, clothing, food, shelter and transportation. Perhaps, this is the main reason that causes certain people to marry for the sake of money.

In summary, I think there is no right or wrong in between marrying for love or money. This is because everyone’s desire and preference is different. In fact, such a decision does not violate any law of marriage in today’s world.