Pie chart. Kindly evaluate. Thank! ^^

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plin0627
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Pie chart. Kindly evaluate. Thank! ^^

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The pie chart outlines the energy production of 5 different energy sources (coal, gas, petro, nuclear and other) in France in 1995 and 2005. Units are measured in percentage.

Overall, most of the energy production saw a growing trend except petro which had reduced during 2005. Apart from this, coal production was the greatest proportion and followed by gas, petro, nuclear and other unknown energy.

As can be seen from the chart, in 1995, coal, gas and petro constituted a higher proportion of energy production, with 29.8%, 29.63% and 29.27% respectively. In contrast, nuclear production was relatively lower, at only 6.4%. Likewise, other unknown source of energy depicted 4.9% of production, which is also the smallest percentage among all.

Similarly, coal, gas and petro remained at the greater figures of energy generation, although petro had dropped to 19.55% by 2005. Conversely, coal’s figure improved to 30.93% whilst gas generation rose to 30.31%. Lastly, the generation of nuclear as well as other source also grew to 10.10% and 9.1% accordingly.
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Re: Pie chart. Kindly evaluate. Thank! ^^

Post by David.IELTS.Examiner »

Hello!

A reasonable report, but there are quite a lot of vocabulary errors ...

had reduced during 2005 (fell by 2005?)

depicted (was)

among all (of all)

at the greater figures (the largest?)

improved (increased)

accordingly (respectively)

You haven't really compared the situations/differences in the two years, which is an essential part of this task.

However, the report is not terrible - you have included the information required. It just needs to be better presented and a little more care with vocab.

All the best,
David
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