Please evaluate my task 2 reponse
Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2016 4:15 pm
Hello Guys ,
Here the Task 2 question that I answered for
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?
Write at least 250 words.
My response is as follows
The Society in which the people live in makes them to chose their own circle of contacts. During the past decade, the interactions between people and their neighbors have been more frequent comparing to the present instances . This is a result of modernization of the society through the technological advancements and change in perspectives of the people in terms of socialization . The comparison between the reasons behind the differences in the relationship of the people in the past and the present can give us clear picture of how to improve them.
In the past , the social interactions of the people with their neighbor were born out of necessity . For example , if a person would like to know the nearby electronic store , they naturally turn towards their neighbor for their possible aid. The help rendered once by their neighbor makes them to return the favor and thereby initializing the social communication . These communication pertains to the relationship between their neighbors closer.
At present , due to the advancements in technology we have all the services at our finger tips . These days everyone has a smartphone . We have an application for everything . For instance , if we are searching for nearby Super Market all we have to do is go to a search engine and search for nearby Markets with the GPS turned On. If things are easily done without depending on anybody , why do we need people for .
The improvement of relationship can be achieved only if people want to socialize with their neighbor . We cannot force people to take their choice . There are certain measures , that can increase the need to socialize with the neighbor . One among them is the creation of Street Society Associations of each locality to discuss issues and matters with their fellow neighbor . This could be only way people would take time in their busy lives to interact .
In conclusion , relationships between people are due to necessity . And the technological advancements curbs the requirement of interaction . I feel that by the creating situation where there will be need for interaction , we can improve relationship of the people with their neighbors.
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I am looking to score a band of 7 at-least . Please evaluate my response and grade me. Any suggestion for improvement is highly appreciated
Here the Task 2 question that I answered for
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours?
Write at least 250 words.
My response is as follows
The Society in which the people live in makes them to chose their own circle of contacts. During the past decade, the interactions between people and their neighbors have been more frequent comparing to the present instances . This is a result of modernization of the society through the technological advancements and change in perspectives of the people in terms of socialization . The comparison between the reasons behind the differences in the relationship of the people in the past and the present can give us clear picture of how to improve them.
In the past , the social interactions of the people with their neighbor were born out of necessity . For example , if a person would like to know the nearby electronic store , they naturally turn towards their neighbor for their possible aid. The help rendered once by their neighbor makes them to return the favor and thereby initializing the social communication . These communication pertains to the relationship between their neighbors closer.
At present , due to the advancements in technology we have all the services at our finger tips . These days everyone has a smartphone . We have an application for everything . For instance , if we are searching for nearby Super Market all we have to do is go to a search engine and search for nearby Markets with the GPS turned On. If things are easily done without depending on anybody , why do we need people for .
The improvement of relationship can be achieved only if people want to socialize with their neighbor . We cannot force people to take their choice . There are certain measures , that can increase the need to socialize with the neighbor . One among them is the creation of Street Society Associations of each locality to discuss issues and matters with their fellow neighbor . This could be only way people would take time in their busy lives to interact .
In conclusion , relationships between people are due to necessity . And the technological advancements curbs the requirement of interaction . I feel that by the creating situation where there will be need for interaction , we can improve relationship of the people with their neighbors.
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I am looking to score a band of 7 at-least . Please evaluate my response and grade me. Any suggestion for improvement is highly appreciated