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please review my essay task 2

Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2016 4:00 pm
by ali15
Some people think distance-learning programmes can never be as good as courses taken in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays the world is witnessing a huge development in teaching methods. This can be seen where students can chose between distance learning and conventional learning. It is agreed that distance learning programs can not be as effective as courses taken in person. This will be proven by looking at how traditional class helps students to develop their life skills and how it allows students to have practical experiences.

Firstly, conventional teaching method helps to improve student’s important life skills. For example, student in class tend to discuss some topics with each other and that helps to develop their communication skills. This example clearly shows that interacting with other in class will make students feel more confident and that will have positive ramification in student’s working life and this trend distance learning can not do. Thus, distance learning will never be as good as traditional class.

Secondly, conventional class allows student to gain practical experience. For instance, in most traditional class student are required to perform lab experiments and make a report about it. This example illustrate that these kinds of experiments will have a satisfactory result as it will increase student knowledge and will help them in future career, however that is not possible with distance learning. Therefore, distance learning will not be better than normal class course.

In conclusion, after analyzing how traditional class helps to develop important life skills and how it provide students with rewarding hand on experience, it is crystal clear that distance learning can not be as effective as conventional class course. It is recommended that this sort of teaching method can be supplement to normal classes.

Re: please review my essay task 2

Posted: Sun Sep 11, 2016 11:44 pm
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Hello!

It is agreed ... - Really? Who by?

You mention discussion, but what about online discussion?

Lab experiments? Which subjects do you mean? What lab experiments are accountants doing?

Despite the claim that you will prove that distance learning is less effective, but you have certainly not done this.

You need to be very careful about your arguments and ensure that you have considered a range of possibilities.

All the best,
David

Re: please review my essay task 2

Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2016 9:12 am
by ali15
Dear David

Thank you for replying.....regarding to your first question it is agreed...who by?.
The answer is by me because the question ask do you agree or disagree, i gave two practical points and i support it with two example that i experienced.

For your second question......You mention discussion, but what about online discussion?

In class discussion student get to talk with each other face to face, agree with some points and reject the other, make a comments and deliver their ideas all this helps to improve students communication skills......regarding to online discussion it does not promote communication skills beside that it has many technical problems like bad connection....

Lastly. Despite the claim that you will prove that distance learning is less effective, but you have certainly not done this.

My two supporting points and my conclusion answers your question :D

best regard
Ali

Re: please review my essay task 2

Posted: Wed Sep 14, 2016 9:22 am
by ali15
Dear Daivd i would like you to assist me with that:

- Is my essay easy to understand?

-How is my essay structure format?

- my cohesion and coherence?

- grammar and vocabulary?

-what band do give me for it?

- Last some advice :D

Thank you

Re: please review my essay task 2

Posted: Mon Sep 19, 2016 9:57 pm
by Flick
ali15 wrote:Some people think distance-learning programmes can never be as good as courses taken in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays the world is witnessing a huge development in teaching methods. This can be seen where students can choose between distance learning and conventional learning. It is agreed that distance learning programs are not as effective as courses taken in person. This will be proven by looking at how traditional classrooms help students to develop their life skills and allows students to have practical experiences.

Firstly, conventional teaching methods help to improve student’s important life skills. For example, students in class tend to discuss topics with each other, which helps to develop their communication skills. This example clearly shows that interacting with others in class will make students feel more confident and that will have positive ramifications on the student’s working life, which distance learning can not do. Thus, distance learning will never be as good as traditional classroom teaching.

Secondly, conventional class allows students to gain practical experience. For instance, in most traditional classrooms, students are required to perform lab experiments and make a report about it. This example illustrates that these kinds of experiments will have a satisfactory result as it will increase student knowledge and will help them in future careers. However, that is not possible with distance learning. Therefore, distance learning is not better than normal classroom learning.

In conclusion, after analyzing how traditional class helps to develop important life skills and how it provides students with rewarding hands-on experience, it is crystal clear that distance learning can not be as effective as conventional classroom lessons. It is recommended that this sort of teaching method can be supplemental to normal classes.

Re: please review my essay task 2

Posted: Sat Sep 24, 2016 8:44 pm
by ali15
Thank you :D

Re: please review my essay task 2

Posted: Fri Sep 30, 2016 6:11 am
by David.IELTS.Examiner
Hi!

Just a quick reply.

'It is agreed by ME ...' is certainly not a valid way to begin an academic essay. I think you mean 'I agree' rather than 'It is agreed'. They have totally different meanings.

Why doesn't online discussion promote communication skills? Many top universities say it does, so you need to demonstrate why they are wrong. Online courses are pretty popular nowadays.

All the best,
David